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Peace River Coal | Management - 1 views

  • Peace River Coal has positioned itself to be a premier coal mining company. Proven, dedicated, skilled and accountable leadership is central to the company's continued growth and success.
    • trehbein
       
      Personification: Giving the company (an entity, not an individual) characteristics that make it sound as if it's acting of it's own accord. This brings together the feelings of one cohesive unit; a 'team' of individuals.
trehbein

Peace River Coal | Business Principles - 0 views

  • Being a good corporate citizen is, by definition, a good employer. We support fair labour practices and promote workplace safety and equality in our operations. We acknowledge the importance of conscientious environmental stewardship and actively seek to minimize the impact of our operations while providing a positive legacy for future generations. 
    • trehbein
       
      Definition: Here, what it means to be a 'good corporate citizen' is shown by following up with an explanatory paragraph.
  • At Peace River Coal, Good Citizenship business principles guide our decisions and actions. We adhere to consistently high standards of business integrity and ethics.
    • trehbein
       
      Use of style, tone and voice: This, as well as other lines of text on the website, show overtones of pride and confidence. This, in turn, instills these feelings in the reader. (IE: If the company is confident in their abilities, the reader should be, too!)
trehbein

Peace River Coal | Peace River Coal Safety - 1 views

  • At Peace River Coal Safety is Paramount
    • trehbein
       
      Could be made more readable, such as: At Peace River Coal, Safety Is Paramount.' By putting a comma in, and ending with a period, it might make a bolder, more thought-out looking statement.
  • zero harm policy
    • trehbein
       
      If this is the name of an actual policy, it could be capitalized to emphasize it's importance.
  • same, non-negotiable rules
    • trehbein
       
      Should not be a comma after 'same', as it isn't really a listable descriptive term as used here.
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  • Ensure that all of our operations have fundamentally safe, well designed plant, equipment and infrastructure
    • trehbein
       
      The grammar here isn't quite correct. It's difficult to read 'All of our operations have... well designed plant,..'
  • Compliance with legislative and other requirements placed upon us, including those to which we voluntarily subscribe, is fundamental to the way we do business. 
    • trehbein
       
      This is a long and potentially confusing sentence that could be re-worded for readability.
  • Rescue team
    • trehbein
       
      'Rescue Team' should possibly all be capitalized, or be all lower-case, unless the team is just called 'Rescue'.
  • On September 18, 2009 Peace River Coal celebrated achieving the milestone of One-year Lost Time Injury Free operation.
    • trehbein
       
      Again, could be re-worded, to something such as "...Peace River Coal operation celebrated the achievement of One-year Lost Time Injury Free." Or, "..celebrated achieving the 'One-Year Lost Time Injury Free' milestone.
  • successful recipients of the "Best and Overall First Aid Award" at the Regional Mines Rescue Competition - July 2009
    • trehbein
       
      Ethos: Exemplifying this proud moment causes the reader to see more respectability in the company. This is not exactly using the company's pre-existing reputation to make a point believable, but it is making a believable point about how the company should be respected by using examples that appeal to the reader's view of the company overall.
  • We recognize that our strength as a company resides in the men and women who contribute to our business.
    • trehbein
       
      Logos: The logical statement here implies that happy, healthy workers contribute more strength to the company itself than unhappy, injured ones, so this statement clearly states that it's in the best interests of the company to keep everyone safe. This is something that the reader can take and agree with at face value because it's an honest, logical statement.
trehbein

Peace River Coal | Coal Mining and Tumbler Ridge Links - 0 views

  • Peace River Coal and WNMS Cooperate on Babcock Falls Trail Coal and Mining Links World Coal Coal Association of Canada
    • trehbein
       
      Effective labelling and layout of links, to direct readers to more information.
trehbein

Peace River Coal | Careers - 0 views

  • to  succeed
    • trehbein
       
      Too many spaces between words.
  • opportunities.
    • trehbein
       
      Repetition: Through the use of the word 'opportunities' multiple times on this page, it encourages the reader (and potential employee) that workign for this company is, in fact, an opportunity, and something that should be acted upon.
trehbein

Peace River Coal | Peace River Coal Home Page - 0 views

  • Peace River Coal Inc., a producer of high-quality metallurgical coal for export, from Canada is jointly owned by Anglo American plc, Hillsborough Resources Ltd., and NEMI Northern Energy and Mining Inc. Anglo American holds a 74% interest in Peace River Coal. Peace River Coal owns substantial coal properties in the Peace River region of northeast British Columbia.
    • trehbein
       
      This paragraph seems a bit jumbled. Because it's the first text people read, it may be more beneficial to state something more general and audience-friendly. What is written here seems a bit technical to jump into right off the start. Or, instead of having it all in one paragraph, it could be split into bullet points for easier reading.
  •  local and other partners
    • trehbein
       
      'Local and others' seems very vague. Something like 'With the help of our local and global partners,' may be more straightforward. It almost seems like using 'others' could be misinterpreted for the reader to think that the company is hiding something about their partners.
  • Click here to view our photo gallery.
    • trehbein
       
      Good lead-in to the photo gallery; straightforward and simple.
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  • Privacy Policy | Terms & Conditions
    • trehbein
       
      Good use of the bottom of the page to give links to other parts of the site. Helps make the page look 'complete'.
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    My Rhetorical Analysis Markup (Peace River Coal website)
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    Tammy's Rhetorical Analysis Markup (Peace River Coal website)
J.Randolph Radney

Generation Y: They've arrived at work with a new attitude | www.usatoday.com | Readability - 0 views

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    What do you think of this description of a subculture in our society?
Mike Howard

SONY make.believe - 2 views

    • Mike Howard
       
      Division and classification exemplified buy organized menus and side nav bars
  • It’s a sight you see more and more often in a place you might not expect, e-readers mingling with paperbacks in libraries across the United States
    • Mike Howard
       
      Imagery, Appeals to Pathos. Hyperbole.
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  • don’t know about you but I get hungry each time I see an amazing food photo. Taking gourmet shots is growing across the globe and n
  • Every now and then, the SGNL team gets a rare opportunity to peek into the behind-the-scenes world of Sony
  • The eye catching VAIO Concept PCs (pictured above) previewed at the the Consumer Electronics Show in January this year were officially announced today
hyram swenson

Tax Consultants Canada | Associate Tax Consulting on Canadian Taxes | Income Tax Prepar... - 0 views

  • Our tax professionals receive ongoing training on all the tax laws so we know where to look to get you the maximum refund you're entitled to.*
    • hyram swenson
       
      This is guaranteed! I feel much more confident knowing they have a written guarantee for there work
J.Randolph Radney

Elev8ed - 0 views

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    This is a call for videos from students.
sarah omens

CIM - 1 views

  • CIM and eOne partner to serve the rest of Canada!    |    CIM is One of Canada’s Best Workplaces    |    CIM wins 50 Best Managed Companies for 10th Consecu
    • sarah omens
       
      as you can see there is lots of movement and also lots of information. i like the way its moving slowly giving you enough time to read the information and at the same time not making it seem boring,.
  • WHO WE ARE LAST 3 FEET™ OUR HISTORY OUR CULTURE AWARDS WHAT WE DO SALES &MERCH EDUCATION BLITZ LAUNCH! CIMPHARMA THE TEAM EXECUTIVE OUR TEAM OUR CLIENTS NEWS CONTACT
  • WHO WE ARE LAST 3 FEET™ OUR HISTORY OUR CULTURE AWARDS WHAT WE DO SALES & MERCH EDUCATION BLITZ LAUNCH! CIMPHARMA THE TEAM EXECUTIVE OUR TEAM OUR CLIENTS NEWS CONTACT
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  • Do you have whatwe arelooking for? > GREAT CAREERS HERE Lea dership at CIM Talking Shop: CIM partners Mike Smith, Shaun M cKenna and Wilf Goodman about retail today. > MEET THE REST OF THE TEAM
J.Randolph Radney

Arab Democracy Reference and Live Feeds - Home / Map - 0 views

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    Arab Democracy site helps provide information on protests in the Middle East.
J.Randolph Radney

Skillful writing of an awful research paper - Analytical Chemistry (ACS Publications) - 3 views

  • My advice is solely based on principles of presenting the objectives, experiments, results, and conclusion in a fashion that as such no one will finish reading them or, if they do, readers will have little chance of understanding or remembering them.
    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      Thesis of the article.
  • practice and a lack of mental concentration
    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      it is important to see the irony in this phrasing.
    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      The colour choice represents solid foundation and conservative values.
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    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      The logo and tag represent serious marketing.
    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      The site seems to be written in frames, which is not the best format for today's Web standards.
  • Royce Murray University of North Carolina - Chapel Hill, ChemistryAnal. Chem., 2011, 83 (3), p 633DOI: 10.1021/ac2000169Publication Date (Web): January 12, 2011Copyright © 2011 American Chemical Society
    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      Prominence of the bibliography of the article provides useful information that is readily retrievable.
  • Rule 1.
    • J.Randolph Radney
       
      It might have been better to have used some sort of highlighting device to make the rules stand out better. Also, punctuating what are not sentences is not really standard form.
J.Randolph Radney

"Which," by James Thurber - Classic American Essays - Humor and Grammar - Lighter Side ... - 1 views

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    The essay by James Thurber, Which
J.Randolph Radney

YouTube - "All Marketers are Liars" - Seth Godin speaks at Google - 0 views

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    This is an excellent discussion of marketing strategy.
J.Randolph Radney

YouTube - An Introduction to Google Talk - 0 views

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    This is a tutorial on Google Talk.
J.Randolph Radney

YouTube - How to Download, Install and Use Google Talk on your PC. - 0 views

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    Here is a free Google phone application.
J.Randolph Radney

The Art of Non-Conformity - 1 views

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    For the non-conformists among you...
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