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good point

Good spot to input your thoughts on motivating factors. It seemed like you were working up to this unknowingly from previous posts.

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He is educate d in the topic because he knows that athletes are under constant pressute to be the best because theat is what they live from

Detail to know about gene manipulation shows sis knowladge

Here the author cuts right to the chase - there's no introduction or extraneous information. He assumes his readership base already knows exactly what he's talking about.

Sentence structure is short and concise. Again, no 'padding' of words. He also uses relatively informal words such as "annoying", setting a relaxed tone to the post.

Use of sarcasm, playing up the humor of the post. It also forces the reader to pay attention to what's being written, as it takes a deeper reading of this commentary to understand when sarcasm is in use.

* This paragraph has a lot going on. She creates conversation by opening with "uhhh…" making it seem like she is talking to you. This also illustrates a feeling of shock. The "yeah I know" creates a relationship between her and the reader. She is right there with us feeling the same thing as we are, or so she assumes.

I like how she connects this whole phrase together. It's a mouthful and the way she writes it makes you have to say it in one breathe.

Nice concise opening sentence.

Nice use of repetition of Joe's name. Creates rhythm and a sense of movement leading into the heart of the topic.

Imagery! And sports-related imagery, too!

I love your honesty with the readers in this intro. Only suggestion - in the last sentence, maybe add an "and" : "..my culture's love for eating, AND my culture's love for uncommon foods..." to help it sound a bit more complete.

let the reader know you tried figuring out what to talk about but maybe don't dwell on it as much

did you mean to say "learned" ?

I like the personal touch here and the background on your family. Also funny

It might be helpful to readers to be more specific.

Link to or list which tape. People might be intrigued because they also listened to the same tape.

The use of a rhetorical question combined with his informal language ("heck") develops his tone on the subject. It conveys his confusion, and a feeling of absurdity, almost more so than if he had simply said, "What?" or even "What the hell?".

His straight forward manner set's up the rest of the post, and is echoed in his opinions. Short, concise, and to the point sentences can be found throughout this post.

For each procedure, he gives a blunt, one word response, and then elaborates briefly. By doing so, he conveys his own voice and opinion, while demonstrating medical knowledge without the complex jargon and sounding too much like a doctor.The readers do not care to know more than what he says.

The blogger takes on an outsider's point of view. She's not the one being influenced by Rihanna's words, and this post is more like a warning to all the girls out their who might be unintelligent enough to take the advice of celebrity, even if it's ridiculous advice. I think she creates a stance here that says that, even though she loves gossip and blogs about it, celebrity life leaves her unscathed. The blogger is letting her readers know that she isn't one of "those" gossip lovers who'll do anything to feel like they're a part of the celebrity world.

Making fun of the naivety of Rihanna and also the other celebrity lovers who would listen to her. She's separating herself again, and also establishing herself as someone who's older and more mature than the average celebrity teen fans (this is a point she makes often in her posts).

Painting an image here. Instead of writing that she thought Rihanna is absurd, she wrote about her actions.

He is using an interesting analogy contrasting with education and politics. The "endless tikering" best describes the useless effort that EDUCATION is doing with society, students, and teachers. Obviously the author is critizising.

"I am a believer" Why would he wrote this instead of I believe? I think he is actually trying to enphasize the speaking method of Martin Luther King: "I have a dream." Or he wants to be in a very specific part of a group segment: believers.

Although he is talking about good things of the system the phrases "very poor" and "at my request" are indirectly that the author is not really considering a good thing.

This dramatically sets the scene for the reader

The author uses the word "certainly" which pushes you toward one direction of the topic he is talking about.

Asking the question allows the readers to be more interactive so that it is sort of like a dialogue.