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Chelsea Hamill

The Weight of Reality: Trifecta - 1 views

  • Our meals are super sized, our population is becoming super sized, and now reality television is catching on to the trend.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like this comparison but maybe reword to help it flow better.
  • because even if you are not trying to lose weight, there are tips on ways to start exercising and eating better, areas I know a lot of us could use some help in.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This makes me want to check out the blog. I think a major issue is that people extreme diet when all they need to do is change their diet to a healthy alternative
  • He created “The Money Diet,” and recorded all the foods he resisted buying, then calculated how much not buying junk food and fast food saved him.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I have always wanted to know what that would be!
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  • (I’m usually in the drive thru with a serious craving for fries and a shake).
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like the insight into you and your thoughts. Helps the reader connect and know more about you.
  • And when you really think about it, wouldn’t you rather spend that money on a fabulous pair of shoes instead of that burger at In n’ Out?
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like how you ended on a question. I noticed that there were a few questions in your blog which is a great way to engage the reader and have them think about what you are saying
Chelsea Hamill

Beauty Is No Longer Truth: The Trifecta! - 2 views

  • Just the other day he was called in for an “emergency liposuction”. Really? Emergency liposuction? I was not aware that needing to have your fat sucked out could be an emergency, but okay.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like that while you have had a more academic approach so far on the subject you are still able to have your own voice come through
  • gained a different perspective and insight to the cosmetic surgery practices. I have seen the “before” and “after” pictures of some AWT patients. They don’t look that different to me –
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like that you are adding in personal examples. I think your opinion matters, this is your blog, don't belittle your opinion. but you have a point that even if we don't see the change as long as the patient does that's the most important factor. I also like the metaphor
  • (let’s face it, I’ll probably have some procedure or treatment done in the next 10 years)
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like the honesty and the insight into your thoughts. I also like the connection to the readers
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  • (Seriously? There is a book about this? Okay, I’ll put my personal opinions aside…for now)
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like that you take an academic approach to the blog profile. I also would like to see more of your voice, wich does come through at various parts of the blog
  • (as I’m sure you’ve begun to realize).
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I want more of your ideas throughout the blog, but maybe that's just me
  • . He uses informal language, and I enjoyed his blunt responses like “dumb”, “not needed", and "stupid".
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like your use of informal language
  • hooey”.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I don't know if I have ever heard the word hooey but you're right its fun
Chelsea Hamill

State of The Pop Scene: Trifecta - 2 views

  • I play sax in a college big band (with a focus on modern jazz), lay down the sax/keys parts in a folk rock group (we are currently in the studio working on our next album), and have a solo project focusing on electronic/indie music.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This is awesome and great information but reading it was a little difficult, maybe reword it to help the flow of it.
  • I have been exploring both the academic and creative sides of music on a daily basis. I am also working towards a Biology degree, for what it’s worth.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This is great background, it tells a lot about how diverse of a person you are.
  • 1. Pay Attention!
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  • You can see for yourself right here: Pop Trash. I
  • This blog,
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Maybe his not this
  • musical discussion.
  • hroughout the posts relevant to the current
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Also it might be a good idea to combine the discussion of the pink background and the description of the blog together.
  • She hails from Manhattan, New York.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like hearing your opinion and your voice in your writing
  • It is just this whale-of-a comparison that is representative of Mel's creative way with words, which is on display in every one of her posts. I
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Like the term whale-of-a comparison. Have some fun with your writing
  • feel like she is supplying a window into her mind,
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      this is what you should add to your blog
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twitter - 0 views

started by Chelsea Hamill on 24 Mar 10 no follow-up yet
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Good General Advice - 0 views

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Step By Step - 0 views

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    This website allows you to search interests or majors as well as a location you would prefer. This website also breaks down the application process in various steps. You can search for scholarship and look at an admission schedule on this website.
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Celebrities: Our Walking Ads - 3 views

  • n't this what we're thinking anyway?  Seriously, wtf??  So Anne, thanks for pointing out the obvious because it needs to be done!  And also because it's fun to read
  • "she did whats?!" that would make the avid gossipists look away with shame at my naivety. 
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Trifecta - 3 views

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started by Chelsea Hamill on 09 Feb 10 no follow-up yet
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Fashion Tidbits - 0 views

  • Uhhhh...yeah I know. You're thinking, OMG, she has such an amaaaaaazing body, while simultaneously wondering, how does that work????? How does she end up coming from the I'm-chosen-to-have-a-naturally-fabulous-body gene pool?But why not meeeeeeeeee???!
  • Uhhhh...yeah I know. You're thinking, OMG, she has such an amaaaaaazing body, while simultaneously wondering, how does that work????
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      * This paragraph has a lot going on. She creates conversation by opening with "uhhh…" making it seem like she is talking to you. This also illustrates a feeling of shock. The "yeah I know" creates a relationship between her and the reader. She is right there with us feeling the same thing as we are, or so she assumes.
  • I'm-chosen-to-have-a-naturally-fabulous-body gene pool?
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like how she connects this whole phrase together. It's a mouthful and the way she writes it makes you have to say it in one breathe.
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  • meeeeeeeeee???!
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      The extension of the word creates a feeling of envy and despair
  • Hehe.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      The hehe makes the previous statement somewhat sarcastic.
  • Woah whoo!
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      o This size font of this sentence makes it stand out and catch your attention. The words themselves are playful and fun. She ends the post in the same causal, colloquial manner.
Chelsea Hamill

Fashion Tidbits - 1 views

  • It was -11 degrees today....brrrr so cold!
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      She uses causal and familiar diction. Her grammar is informal as well adding commentary to her sentence.
  • It might be nothing for you Canadians but I have no patience when my fingers feel like they're about to fall off!
  • I'm telling you, there ARE HEAPS of coffee shops in Seoul. It's not like Starbucks doesn't have enough money already, you know?
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      * She previously tells the readers that the coffee prices have been raised. The use of all caps adds an emphasis to the number of coffee shops there are. It stresses how frustrated she is at the new prices.
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  • There. My little rant is over.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This short sentence is very conversational. She is writing almost like she is speaking directly to us.
  • I was one grumpy, cappuccino lady today.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      She uses the picture above to illustrate how she is feeling. I just think this sentence is funny. Something that most can relate to.
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