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smdyaig

Dee Sunshine - 1 views

deerimbaud.blogspot.com

voicex

shared by smdyaig on 09 Feb 10 - Cached
  • One thing I have learned (and which I need to keep re-learning) is to learn to sit with my sorrow, not to try to fight it. It is okay to be sad. Let me say that one more time... it is okay to be sad.
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      saying it to himself as much / more than to us
  • There, that's better...
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      literally happening as he says it.
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      literally happening as he says it.
  • Along the route of the pilgrimage they were selling everything from cabbages to fibre optic lights to shrink wrapped shirts to pots and pans, which made me wonder, who buys a frying pan on a pilgrimage???
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      The ??? = audible voice (not just literary)
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  • ns, which made me wonder, who buys a frying pan on a pilgrimage???
  • , which made me wonder, who buys a frying pan on a pilgrimage???
  • India!
  • "honeymoon"
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      meaningful, deliberate "s
  • Slowly, slowly, over the last 16 months, my heart has been healing, and I've been piecing myself together again. Slowly, slowly... but still not fixed, and still not immune to anniversaries of sorrow.
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      Repetition of phrase = poetic
  • ndia! I love this mad, beautiful, smelly, fragrant, gentle, noisy country. It is the best place I have ever known. It is my home, my OM, my bone, my blood, my soul.
    • smdyaig
      smdyaig on 09 Feb 10
       
      rhythmic, only one way to read this.
  • the best place I have ever known. It is my home, my OM, my bone, my blood, my
  • d, and still not immune to anniversaries of sorr
tommyalexander

Nike: Greek Goddess of Confiscating Tapes (annotated) - 0 views

joeposnanski.com/...-goddess-of-confiscating-tapes

voicex

shared by tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10 - Cached
  • So you probably know by now
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
       
      Immediately starts off with a conversational voice. By saying "you probably know by now", the reader knows that whatever he is talking about has been in the news. It makes the reader want to know what happened, if they don't already.
  • Crawford took the ball at James, they both jumped
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
       
      He starts off by describing an actual basketball play. This sets up the sarcasm and humor in the rest of the paragraph.
  • then another 360, then he took off one of his shoes and bonked James in the head with it, put the shoe back on, pulled out a shaving cream pie and shoved that in James face, took out a bottle of seltzer water and sprayed James, then he poked James in the eye Three Stooges style, then he came up with a quick hip hop song called “Be Gone Lebron,” then he pinched James’ cheek, beat James at thumb wrestling, gave James a wedgie and, finally, dunked the ball, two-handed, rattling the rim, while James cried like a child lost at the mall.
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
       
      The rest of the paragraph is extremely exaggerated, obviously sarcastic remarks about what Jordan Crawford must have done in the air before dunking on Lebron. His sarcasm is related to the point of the article which is alluded to in the title. His description includes a combination of both actual basketball terms as well as just random references
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  • NOBODY
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
       
      He continues his conversational voice by predicting what the reader is probably thinking. His use of all caps implies a voice inflection. You imagine the word "nobody" being said with a large amount of disbelief.
  • PHONES
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      Once again the use of all caps makes the reader imagine this word being said with disbelief. Also talking about cameras on phones gives the context of the writer's age. While cameras on phones are a relatively recent creation, young people don't tend to talk about cameras on phones with a sense of disbelief. This implies the writer has been around for some time
  • Well, no, there were people filming it
  • the Nike official called out his Nike storm troopers, who promptly ran around the place shooting lasers and confiscating any and all tapes of the offending dunk
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      Using a pop culture reference for humor. He could have just said "Nike sent some officials out to confiscate the tape". Instead he chose this way which is very rich in imagery.
  • Animal Farmish
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      Reference to the novel Animal Farm by Orwell. Conjures images of out of control governments and the loss of rights. Dystopia
  • — happiness, in this case, being our unalienable right to laugh at LeBron
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      Uses a dash to abruptly change the tone from serious to humorous.
  • loved that slogan
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      He chooses to use parentheses here instead of a dash because this thought is unrelated to his flow of words. Also, the pop culture reference to "Just Do It"
  • *It’s ZAY-vee-ur. Not ex-ZAY-vee-ur.
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      A funny aside. Once again he uses humor to make his voice stand out.
  • to comfort the comfortable, to afflict the afflicted, to keep someone as beloved as LeBron James off of YouTube. I mean, what?
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      Once again he is using sarcasm. Interesting word choice comfort->comfortable, afflict->afflicted
  • THE LeBron James
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      by using all caps in the word "the" the reader knows to say it as "thee" in their head
  • Personally, I think they should …
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      He closes of the post by basically making a list of all of Nike's misfortunes/failures from the last several years. Because it's always funny to laugh at the misfortunes of others...
  • confiscate his entire career as a basketball executive
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      ouch
  • Confiscate Matt Leinart
    • tommyalexander
      tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
       
      HARSH!
Dongoh Kim

Politics: the biggest problem in education | dougbelshaw.com/blog - 0 views

dougbelshaw.com/...e-biggest-problem-in-education

voicex

shared by Dongoh Kim on 04 Feb 10 - Cached
  • Education, on the other hand, is a very party political matter with endless tinkering of the system to attempt to win the support of middle-class voters.
    • Dongoh Kim
      Dongoh Kim on 04 Feb 10
       
      He is using an interesting analogy contrasting with education and politics. The "endless tikering" best describes the useless effort that EDUCATION is doing with society, students, and teachers. Obviously the author is critizising.
  • I’m a believer in government being as small as possible: whilst the state needs to intervene in the ‘big picture’ of education, I think there are other organizations and bodies eminently more suitable to deal with assessment and examinations, for example.
    • Dongoh Kim
      Dongoh Kim on 04 Feb 10
       
      "I am a believer" Why would he wrote this instead of I believe? I think he is actually trying to enphasize the speaking method of Martin Luther King: "I have a dream." Or he wants to be in a very specific part of a group segment: believers.
  • the new rules allowed my parents to take me out of the local, very poor, middle school (at my request) and install me at a much better school.
    • Dongoh Kim
      Dongoh Kim on 04 Feb 10
       
      Although he is talking about good things of the system the phrases "very poor" and "at my request" are indirectly that the author is not really considering a good thing.
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  • I’m certainly against the endless analogies and comparisons of schools to businesses. Educating children is not like making products to sell at a profit.
    • Dongoh Kim
      Dongoh Kim on 04 Feb 10
       
      In these sentences, he is standing very strong his point of view. His phrasing, diction, and personal opinion is highlighted clearly.
  • Although I’ve been accused of it for the first time today, I’m not one for manipulating others and playing politics within my organization. Not at all: I’m there to make things better for the system – locally, nationally and internationally.
    • Dongoh Kim
      Dongoh Kim on 04 Feb 10
       
      The phrase "Not at all" again he is standing his point very clearly. He is rejecting strongly what others would be thinking of him. Very clever. Moreover, he bolds his main sentence backing up his earlier phrase: "Not at all"
sunmeeholmes

Rihanna Gives Stellar Advice | I Need My Fix - 0 views

www.ineedmyfix.com/...rihanna-gives-stellar-advice

voicex rihanna

shared by sunmeeholmes on 04 Feb 10 - Cached
  • her advice to girls everywhere
    • sunmeeholmes
      sunmeeholmes on 04 Feb 10
       
      The blogger takes on an outsider's point of view. She's not the one being influenced by Rihanna's words, and this post is more like a warning to all the girls out their who might be unintelligent enough to take the advice of celebrity, even if it's ridiculous advice. I think she creates a stance here that says that, even though she loves gossip and blogs about it, celebrity life leaves her unscathed. The blogger is letting her readers know that she isn't one of "those" gossip lovers who'll do anything to feel like they're a part of the celebrity world.
  • (gee…imagine?? naked pictures taken in the year 2009 and end up on the Internet…who would have thunk?)
    • sunmeeholmes
      sunmeeholmes on 04 Feb 10
       
      Making fun of the naivety of Rihanna and also the other celebrity lovers who would listen to her. She's separating herself again, and also establishing herself as someone who's older and more mature than the average celebrity teen fans (this is a point she makes often in her posts).
  • I rolled my eyes so hard when I read these quotes that my contact lenses stayed in the back of my head.
    • sunmeeholmes
      sunmeeholmes on 04 Feb 10
       
      Painting an image here. Instead of writing that she thought Rihanna is absurd, she wrote about her actions.
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  • nekkid
    • sunmeeholmes
      sunmeeholmes on 04 Feb 10
       
      The blogger prurposefully uses slang to emphasize the fact that she would never be the type of person to use slang like this. It's very out of place, but appropriate to use when you're pointing out another person's mistake. It's just another emphasis on Rihanna's lack of knowledge, by repeating her words using slang. The reader automatically attributes the word to what Rihanna has said, not the blogger.
  • keep them private unless you want them on the Internet then give them to a boyfriend
    • sunmeeholmes
      sunmeeholmes on 04 Feb 10
       
      She spends the whole post writing about on the stupidity of Rihanna's comments, and the supposed stupidity of those young girls who would follow her advice, but at the end, she suggests that maybe this type of person would want naked photos of themselves online anyway. It's her final way of shaking her head at all the gullible girls out there. And she's making clear that there really are different types of gossip bloggers, and this one is not hers.
taylorcornelson

15 Most Annoying Types of Twitter Users - 0 views

soshable.com/nnoying-types-of-twitter-users

voicex

shared by taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10 - Cached
  • It can be argued that those of us who tweet links to content on the web are the most annoying of Twitter users.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Here the author cuts right to the chase - there's no introduction or extraneous information. He assumes his readership base already knows exactly what he's talking about.
  • Otherwise, there are probably dozens of other types that are just as annoying. 
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Sentence structure is short and concise. Again, no 'padding' of words. He also uses relatively informal words such as "annoying", setting a relaxed tone to the post.
  • With as much money as people are apparently making on FOREX, it’s amazing that they have time to work their Twitter accounts.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Use of sarcasm, playing up the humor of the post. It also forces the reader to pay attention to what's being written, as it takes a deeper reading of this commentary to understand when sarcasm is in use.
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  • When you post links to stories, you really should make sure that everyone can see what the story says rather than link to your own site and expect people to click through from your site to the source content.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Again, more sarcasm.
  • Just a thought.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Short sentence creates a contrast to the previous sentence, creating interest for the reader.
  • IF YOU TWEET, EMAIL, IM, OR DO ANY FORM OF COMMUNICATION IN ALL CAPS, IT MEANS THAT YOU’RE YELLING WHATEVER IT IS THAT YOU’RE TRYING TO SAY!!!!!! MAKE SURE THAT WHAT YOU YELL IS WORTH YELLING!!!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Again, humor is used, and in an ironic way. Creates a connection to the reader because, if he assumes his audience correctly, they can completely relate to what he's saying.
  • For those not in the game, it can get rather mundane if all you post is who you’ve assassinated, what weapons you’ve purchased, and how we can join your clan/family/ring/dojo.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Complex sentence creates rhythm and movement through at the post.
  • I know. Everyone loves Oprah.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Short sentences create an introductory "hook".
  • You can’t say anything bad about her because she is perfection boxed up into human form.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Great imagery here - helps draw the reader in to the description.
  • It reminds me of the people who followed Forrest Gump on his runs across the country. They were there, waiting for him to say something magical, and it never came.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Pop culture reference assumes a certain type of readership and age, while at the same time reinforcing the visual nature of the description of Oprah as a bearded Tom Hanks.
  • It’s the Internet. Porn is everywhere. Why would anyone go to Twitter to find it? Answer: they don’t.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Nice coupling of short sentences, creating rhythmic structure.
  • I know Twitter in its purest form is supposed to be somewhat mundane, but some people take it way too far.
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      I personally can greatly relate to this post, reinforcing a sense of connection with the author.
  • Still, that shouldn’t be ALL that you tweet, should it?
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Question creates a natural transition and again makes the reader think about what's just been asked.
  • That’s nice. What are you going to Tweet about?
    • taylorcornelson
      taylorcornelson on 04 Feb 10
       
      Condescending voice communicated through text helps reader 'hear' the author.
bamk340

Stop the Stuffing! - David Lebovitz - 1 views

www.davidlebovitz.com/...stop_the_stuffing.html

voicex

shared by bamk340 on 04 Feb 10 - Cached
  • métro
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      means subway in English
  • face à face
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      means one-on-one
  • affiche
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      means poster
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  • Mr. Ed
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Mr. Ed is a horse from this comedy back in the day.
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Expects/forces audience to look up this reference if they don't know it (the comedy aired in the 60s)
  • le gavage
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      or force-feeding
  • foie gras
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      literally means fatty liver
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      He puts stuffs this first paragraph with French words, probably to set the stage and emphasize to the audience that he is indeed in France and he knows the culture, and probably also for a humorous effect!
  • rocketed
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      an action verb, creates a very vivid (an kind of humorous) image in my mind.
  • unequivocally daring
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      the use of adverb and adjective
  • offal
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      just want to add that in asian culture, we like eating animal intestines like liver, heart...
  • chow down
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      I guess here he is creating an image that eating intestines is not "forks and knives". His tone and word choice changes to "chow down," which is more casual and create an image (at least of me) of a person stuffing down a lot of food with the person's bare hands.
  • btw: In case you invite me over for dinner, I'm with that camp.
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      just wanted to make note of his use of online language. he's gradually changing the tone a little. In the beginning of the paragraph, he uses more complicated phrases like "unequivocally daring" to describe his subject, and towards the end he's using words like "chow down" and "btw"
  • to try horse milk
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      this post contains a lot of links to past posts when he wrote about these topics. i think it is very smart that he only links to the more uncommon foods, like horse milk, that way, it'll attract more people to read about it.
  • Américains
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Don't quite understand why he decided to say Americans in French. But probably for a humorous effect? Or he's trying to imply that he is viewing this from a French perspective?
  • There's also of a bit of dubious discussions about how everyone here are either really careful or eat in moderation. Or that people are starving themselves to stay thin, or that the French eat anything—fries, crème brûlée, and triple-cream cheese with reckless abandon, yet stay remarkably thin, no matter what.
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      This is a really long sentence. I feel this is generally this blogger's style. He writes a lot of length sentences and not very many short and choppy ones. This kind of show his string of thoughts and his excitement in the topic that he supplies his sentences with endless information.
  • Well, except they speak French very well and somehow seem to know all those verbs.
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Ends paragraph with a side note that states the obvious and brings in, i guess, an unexplainable phenomenon. This is part of the humor he brings to his blog.
  • a commenter remarked that I was a typical American who was part of the posse giving foie gras "bad press". (Er, dude, I eat foie gras.)
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Parallels bad about foie gras with being a paparazzi. Use of quotes, "bad press," emphasizes that the commenter was wrong about what he had to say about foie gras. Foie gras is also personified, like a star. His side thought, put in parenthesis illustrate a clear change in tone, calling the commenter as "dude" minimizes the importance of the person, that he is just some guy. Yet the blogger tries to be annoyed without being meaning. Adding "er" in front or writing out the sound he is making, makes the sentence more humorous instead.
  • Only because it's part of the French culinary heritage and vocabulary, and since I'm trying to fit in, I once thought about trying horse meat, just to give it a go.
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Another trend I found in his writing is not only use of long sentences, but also beginning these sentences with dependent clauses. The blogger could have rephrased this sentence to make it more active. By placing the main idea of this sentence in the back of the sentence, he's trying to build drama and in a way kind of justifying himself before telling the audience what he really wants to tell.
  • icky stuff
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      the word choice "icky" creates a more child-like voice. I can imagine him twitching and tencing up as he is saying "icky"
  • I didn't really
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      the italics illustrates him trying to convince himself that he didn't need to try horse meat.
  • folks...whew!
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      by calling the audience "folks" he groups all the people reading his blog together. Makes it kind of seem like he's performing a monologue (where he gets to bring up the audience. In addition, the word "whew" is an onamanopedia, which creates an image of him wiping sweat off his forehead.
  • (only because my first French teacher asked me, "Why is everyone in California so politically-correct?", so I have an image to maintain)
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Another characteristic of his style is to interrupt his sentences with his stories and side thoughts. Although here it is in within the parenthesis, usually, they are inserted as clauses in the sentence.
  • scarfing
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      kind of like the word "chow down" he used early. creates an image of him stuffing himself with food and gulping down a lot of food.
  • I don't know what else is on the menu, but I'm pretty sure there won't be any horse meat. If there is, I'll let someone else have my portion...because 'tis the season of sharing.
    • bamk340
      bamk340 on 04 Feb 10
       
      Topic gradually digressed from him seeing posters advocating others not to eat certain foods to him talking about horse meat and Americans versus French in being adventurous in trying foods. he likes to digress yet in the end, somehow brings everything back together. I really like his ending sentence to this short paragraph how he gives a "legit" reason for not trying exotic foods.
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