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morgan macbride

Voice Ex (Morgan MacBride) - 0 views

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    "Black applicants are more than five times as likely as whites to be accepted to private schools, and 220 times as likely to be accepted at public schools." This is a use of statistics that does more than merely display numerical data. The extreme nature of these statistics shows her voice in that it calls into question the validity of affirmative action and those that fervently support it
cdcrone

Against the Odds with Admissions Gods - 0 views

shared by cdcrone on 03 Feb 10 - Cached
  • “Left undiscussed, however, is how much unnecessary discrimination against whites and Asians is necessary in order to maintain the attendance of minorities.”
    • Nicole Tam
       
      I'm not sure that this quote is the best to show that she has a strong stance against affirmative action. I thought this was stated in a confusing way, but beyond that my interpretation of this quote was that discrimination against asians and whites was necessary to keep minorities in law schools. She might be stronger about her dislike for affirmative action throughout the blog, but this quote doesn't capture that sentiment to me.
  • These statistics are also adding a taste of cynicism to her voice; as many law schools deny the magnitude of affirmative action, her proof blatantly contradicts these assertions.
    • Nicole Tam
       
      I think the use of statistics adds to both her argument and yours. It helps support your argument, and gives more authority to your voice.
  • If you follow this line of reasoning, affirmative action or preferential treatment should not look at race, but rather family income and one’s socioeconomics.
    • Nicole Tam
       
      This is a really interesting point to make. I never really thought about affirmative action in terms of socioeconomic.
    • cdcrone
       
      I agree...the way you present the article and the flow of your own voice really help present this as a new option. Instead of just complaining about something and offering no solutions, you offer something that seems logical. This logical reasoning makes your post read much more powerfully.
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  • What happens to the poor white men and women? Nothing good. This improper use of a once beneficial program completely undermines the foundations of equality and the incentive to work hard for those that will be adversely affected by affirmative action.
    • Nicole Tam
       
      Your use of language and the question helped to make your opinion extremely clear. You have some strong opinons, especially because this issue is personal for you, and I think it's great that your voice is as strong as your opinions.
  • Her words and voice shall enlighten the many ignorant who naively call opponents to affirmative racist.
    • cdcrone
       
      The strong finish here makes me want to come back and read more.
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    "Her words and voice shall enlighten the many ignorant who naively call opponents to affirmative racist. America is a land of opportunity, freedom, and most importantly equality. It is the barbaric mechanisms of discrimination such as affirmative action, that erode the perilous work America has done to establish itself as the great country it is today." This clearly shows my voice and my tone towards the issue of affirmative action
Chelsea Hamill

Beauty Is No Longer Truth: The Trifecta! - 2 views

  • My mother is a registered nurse, and after 18 years as a stay-at-home mom, re- entered the world of medicine as the nurse to our plastic surgeon friend.
    • bamk340
       
      i like how you are giving us your background and also a sense of authority and your knowledge in the field
  • just as much cottage cheese
    • bamk340
       
      haha, very vivid metaphor
  • rediculous
    • bamk340
       
      just so you can take note of this
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  • C’mon. Be Honest. You kinda love Heidi Montag. I mean, if nothing else you love to hate her. Frankly, I give her props. She has managed to stay in the spotlight for what, like 5 years now? (does anyone know why, exactly?) And just when she and good old Spencer begin to fade out of US Weekly…BAM! She’s on the cover of People, staring at you with her expressionless face (courtesy of unnecessary Botox) and breasts that are so unnaturally large they might pop out of the cover and stab you in the eyes.
    • bamk340
       
      i really like your voice here! i can see it in certain parts of the second post, but i feel that it's not too consistent.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This is what I wanted from you. The diction and pop culture references make reading the blog fun and intriguing
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Love the way this ends
  • it remains academic, giving only necessary information.
    • glnnrivera
       
      consider subbing "informative" in lieu of "academic." I think it is more fitting to what you are trying to convey.
  • I don’t think I have heard the word hooey since first grade, let alone from a grown man, but it is a bit refreshing
    • glnnrivera
       
      awesome insertion of you in here. Really get a feel for you tone with sentences like this one.
  • Just the other day he was called in for an “emergency liposuction”. Really? Emergency liposuction? I was not aware that needing to have your fat sucked out could be an emergency, but okay.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like that while you have had a more academic approach so far on the subject you are still able to have your own voice come through
  • gained a different perspective and insight to the cosmetic surgery practices. I have seen the “before” and “after” pictures of some AWT patients. They don’t look that different to me –
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like that you are adding in personal examples. I think your opinion matters, this is your blog, don't belittle your opinion. but you have a point that even if we don't see the change as long as the patient does that's the most important factor. I also like the metaphor
  • (let’s face it, I’ll probably have some procedure or treatment done in the next 10 years)
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like the honesty and the insight into your thoughts. I also like the connection to the readers
  • (Seriously? There is a book about this? Okay, I’ll put my personal opinions aside…for now)
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like that you take an academic approach to the blog profile. I also would like to see more of your voice, wich does come through at various parts of the blog
  • (as I’m sure you’ve begun to realize).
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I want more of your ideas throughout the blog, but maybe that's just me
  • . He uses informal language, and I enjoyed his blunt responses like “dumb”, “not needed", and "stupid".
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like your use of informal language
  • hooey”.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I don't know if I have ever heard the word hooey but you're right its fun
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    Is Heidi Montag a Hero? Dr. Youn's Plastic Surgery Predictions for 2010 Part 1 Part 2 (proof that he does not only talk about celebrity figures) Santa Claus and Plastic Surgery? Octomom Had a Tummy Tuck (I'm Pretty Sure) (see hooey reference) you provided extra information about links for people to find out more which is good and helpful
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