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Against the Odds with Admissions Gods - 0 views

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“Left undiscussed, however, is how much unnecessary discrimination against whites and Asians is necessary in order to maintain the attendance of minorities.”
- Nicole Tam on 04 Feb 10
  
  I'm not sure that this quote is the best to show that she has a strong stance against affirmative action. I thought this was stated in a confusing way, but beyond that my interpretation of this quote was that discrimination against asians and whites was necessary to keep minorities in law schools. She might be stronger about her dislike for affirmative action throughout the blog, but this quote doesn't capture that sentiment to me.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">I'm not sure that this quote is the best to show that she has a strong stance against affirmative action. I thought this was stated in a confusing way, but beyond that my interpretation of this quote was that discrimination against asians and whites was necessary to keep minorities in law schools. She might be stronger about her dislike for affirmative action throughout the blog, but this quote doesn't capture that sentiment to me.</div>
  
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These statistics are also adding a taste of cynicism to her voice; as many law schools deny the magnitude of affirmative action, her proof blatantly contradicts these assertions.
- Nicole Tam on 04 Feb 10
  
  I think the use of statistics adds to both her argument and yours. It helps support your argument, and gives more authority to your voice.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">I think the use of statistics adds to both her argument and yours. It helps support your argument, and gives more authority to your voice.</div>
  
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What happens to the poor white men and women? Nothing good. This improper use of a once beneficial program completely undermines the foundations of equality and the incentive to work hard for those that will be adversely affected by affirmative action.
- Nicole Tam on 04 Feb 10
  
  Your use of language and the question helped to make your opinion extremely clear. You have some strong opinons, especially because this issue is personal for you, and I think it's great that your voice is as strong as your opinions.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Your use of language and the question helped to make your opinion extremely clear. You have some strong opinons, especially because this issue is personal for you, and I think it's great that your voice is as strong as your opinions.</div>
  
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If you follow this line of reasoning, affirmative action or preferential treatment should not look at race, but rather family income and one’s socioeconomics.
- Nicole Tam on 04 Feb 10
  
  This is a really interesting point to make. I never really thought about affirmative action in terms of socioeconomic.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">This is a really interesting point to make. I never really thought about affirmative action in terms of socioeconomic.</div>
  
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- cdcrone on 04 Feb 10
  
  I agree...the way you present the article and the flow of your own voice really help present this as a new option. Instead of just complaining about something and offering no solutions, you offer something that seems logical. This logical reasoning makes your post read much more powerfully.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">I agree...the way you present the article and the flow of your own voice really help present this as a new option. Instead of just complaining about something and offering no solutions, you offer something that seems logical. This logical reasoning makes your post read much more powerfully.</div>
  
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Her words and voice shall enlighten the many ignorant who naively call opponents to affirmative racist.
- cdcrone on 04 Feb 10
  
  The strong finish here makes me want to come back and read more.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">The strong finish here makes me want to come back and read more.</div>
  
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morgan macbride on 03 Feb 10

"Her words and voice shall enlighten the many ignorant who naively call opponents to affirmative racist. America is a land of opportunity, freedom, and most importantly equality. It is the barbaric mechanisms of discrimination such as affirmative action, that erode the perilous work America has done to establish itself as the great country it is today." This clearly shows my voice and my tone towards the issue of affirmative action

<div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">"Her words and voice shall enlighten the many ignorant who naively call opponents to affirmative racist. America is a land of opportunity, freedom, and most importantly equality. It is the barbaric mechanisms of discrimination such as affirmative action, that erode the perilous work America has done to establish itself as the great country it is today." This clearly shows my voice and my tone towards the issue of affirmative action</div>

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Nike: Greek Goddess of Confiscating Tapes (annotated) - 0 views

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So you probably know by now
- tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
  
  Immediately starts off with a conversational voice. By saying "you probably know by now", the reader knows that whatever he is talking about has been in the news. It makes the reader want to know what happened, if they don't already.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Immediately starts off with a conversational voice. By saying "you probably know by now", the reader knows that whatever he is talking about has been in the news. It makes the reader want to know what happened, if they don't already.</div>
  
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Crawford took the ball at James, they both jumped
- tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
  
  He starts off by describing an actual basketball play. This sets up the sarcasm and humor in the rest of the paragraph.
  
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then another 360, then he took off one of his shoes and bonked James in the head with it, put the shoe back on, pulled out a shaving cream pie and shoved that in James face, took out a bottle of seltzer water and sprayed James, then he poked James in the eye Three Stooges style, then he came up with a quick hip hop song called “Be Gone Lebron,” then he pinched James’ cheek, beat James at thumb wrestling, gave James a wedgie and, finally, dunked the ball, two-handed, rattling the rim, while James cried like a child lost at the mall.
- tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
  
  The rest of the paragraph is extremely exaggerated, obviously sarcastic remarks about what Jordan Crawford must have done in the air before dunking on Lebron. His sarcasm is related to the point of the article which is alluded to in the title. His description includes a combination of both actual basketball terms as well as just random references
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">The rest of the paragraph is extremely exaggerated, obviously sarcastic remarks about what Jordan Crawford must have done in the air before dunking on Lebron. His sarcasm is related to the point of the article which is alluded to in the title. His description includes a combination of both actual basketball terms as well as just random references</div>
  
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NOBODY
- tommyalexander on 03 Feb 10
  
  He continues his conversational voice by predicting what the reader is probably thinking. His use of all caps implies a voice inflection. You imagine the word "nobody" being said with a large amount of disbelief.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">He continues his conversational voice by predicting what the reader is probably thinking. His use of all caps implies a voice inflection. You imagine the word "nobody" being said with a large amount of disbelief.</div>
  
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PHONES
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  Once again the use of all caps makes the reader imagine this word being said with disbelief. Also talking about cameras on phones gives the context of the writer's age. While cameras on phones are a relatively recent creation, young people don't tend to talk about cameras on phones with a sense of disbelief. This implies the writer has been around for some time
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Once again the use of all caps makes the reader imagine this word being said with disbelief. Also talking about cameras on phones gives the context of the writer's age. While cameras on phones are a relatively recent creation, young people don't tend to talk about cameras on phones with a sense of disbelief. This implies the writer has been around for some time</div>
  
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Well, no, there were people filming it
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the Nike official called out his Nike storm troopers, who promptly ran around the place shooting lasers and confiscating any and all tapes of the offending dunk
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  Using a pop culture reference for humor. He could have just said "Nike sent some officials out to confiscate the tape". Instead he chose this way which is very rich in imagery.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Using a pop culture reference for humor. He could have just said "Nike sent some officials out to confiscate the tape". Instead he chose this way which is very rich in imagery.</div>
  
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Animal Farmish
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  Reference to the novel Animal Farm by Orwell. Conjures images of out of control governments and the loss of rights. Dystopia
  
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— happiness, in this case, being our unalienable right to laugh at LeBron
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  Uses a dash to abruptly change the tone from serious to humorous.
  
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loved that slogan
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  He chooses to use parentheses here instead of a dash because this thought is unrelated to his flow of words. Also, the pop culture reference to "Just Do It"
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">He chooses to use parentheses here instead of a dash because this thought is unrelated to his flow of words. Also, the pop culture reference to "Just Do It"</div>
  
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*It’s ZAY-vee-ur. Not ex-ZAY-vee-ur.
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  A funny aside. Once again he uses humor to make his voice stand out.
  
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to comfort the comfortable, to afflict the afflicted, to keep someone as beloved as LeBron James off of YouTube. I mean, what?
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  Once again he is using sarcasm. Interesting word choice comfort->comfortable, afflict->afflicted
  
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THE LeBron James
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  by using all caps in the word "the" the reader knows to say it as "thee" in their head
  
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Personally, I think they should …
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  He closes of the post by basically making a list of all of Nike's misfortunes/failures from the last several years. Because it's always funny to laugh at the misfortunes of others...
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">He closes of the post by basically making a list of all of Nike's misfortunes/failures from the last several years. Because it's always funny to laugh at the misfortunes of others...</div>
  
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confiscate his entire career as a basketball executive
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  ouch
  
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Confiscate Matt Leinart
- tommyalexander on 04 Feb 10
  
  HARSH!
  
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