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cdcrone

AVID | Resources - 0 views

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    Resources for the under-served high-school student in finding, getting ready for, and paying for college. The Resources page has -all-purpose college help -College entrance Exam help -College Admissions help -Financial Aid and Scholarship help -State Specific Funding/college help
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    One of the sites recommended by one of the directors of admission at the Viterbi School of Engineering.
cdcrone

NACAC - Student Resources - 0 views

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    The National Association for College Admission Counseling Online Resources for College-bound students including info and links to Deadline Calendar College Prep Calendar College Lists State and Fed. Resources for funding Financial Aid Resources
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    Another from USC Viterbi
sunmeeholmes

CollegePrep-101 - Home of all Your College Preparation Needs - 0 views

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    This site has college planning checklists for each grade level, test prep info, scholarship links (although it's not very thorough), etc.
tommyalexander

Scholarships.com: Free College Scholarship Search - 2 views

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    Search for prospective colleges and get linked directly to their financial aid pages.
bamk340

International Students - colleges in United States - apply to US colleges - 0 views

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    A page within Collegeboard website specifically for international students applying to colleges in the states
Scott Prentice

College Applications - Tips, Advice, and College Application Requirements - 0 views

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    done
Scott Prentice

Dirty Secrets of College Admissions - The Daily Beast - 0 views

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    Blog
Lauren Goehner

Sports Cereal: Trifecta - 1 views

  • It was wild.
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      haha, I like your voice and use of shorter sentences. Good intro.
  • I decided that I should input my opinions on sports related issues and so I started this blog. I pride myself on trying to being fair. I still have my favorite sports teams and athletes that I root for, but I strive to be fair in my sports related analyses. I guess you'll agree or disagree based on my upcoming posts.
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      nice way to tell us about what you will be blogging about, while giving insight into your personality and character
  • So let’s go over the credentials again: live in the second largest sports market; college student; and willing to admit things that might be painful. Alright, looks good.
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      good voice
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  • a sport I have loved since birth basically
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      maybe add the basically earlier -- "a sport I have basically loved since birth"
  • Basically, he doesn’t sound like he’s whining and that’s a good thing for the reader.
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      good intro/summary about simmons - i like that you use your voice to talk about his
  • persona
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      maybe a new word for persona?
  • He finds the right balance.
    • Lauren Goehner
       
      good job reviewing his blog, but maybe include a couple sentences at the end about how it might influence your writing, or some way to kind of sum it up/conclude the post and wrap it up
Chelsea Hamill

State of The Pop Scene: Trifecta - 2 views

  • Sometimes music relaxes me. Sometimes it inspires. Sometime it gets my blood-pumping
    • bamk340
       
      I like your use of repetition, but maybe choose to either use "music" or "it", i think that'll emphasizes the idea more.
  • My blog will follow suit in this category—a focus on content above all.
    • bamk340
       
      doesn't seem to connect with the flow of the paragraph. maybe add a transition word here?
  • The sub-line of the “Pop Trash Addicts” title reads: “Oh no, you didn’t.” Well, oh yes, I did.
    • bamk340
       
      haha, this part's funny!
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  • Besides being a pop fanatic, she has a love for "guilt pleasures, elephants, and all things aquamarine." Interesting.
    • bamk340
       
      i think you should have more of these choppy or one word sentences, it reveals more character and your voice.
  • swift
    • bamk340
       
      just point this out so you remember to fix this
  • al of her
    • bamk340
       
      so you can fix this too.
  • as if I am the privileged owner of a limited release DVD with BONUS special features.
    • bamk340
       
      i like these metaphors! makes the reader think and makes what you are saying more interesting.
  • Mel's voice is casual, honest, and creatively playful. If she were a singer instead of a blogger she would definitely be singing with melismas.
    • bamk340
       
      a good ending that connects with the beginning
  • jazz artists include John Coltrane, Brian Blade, Vincent Herring, Bill Evans, and Joshua Redman.
    • morgan macbride
       
      great list of jazz artists, i like how you juxtapose this list with that of a group of musicians from a completely different genre
    • morgan macbride
       
      great list of jazz artists, i like how you juxtapose this list with that of a group of musicians from a completely different genre
  • or plague, depending on the song
    • morgan macbride
       
      funny idea, maybe take out of parenthesis
  • urthermore, Mike displays a clear command of sarcasm and a witty sensibility which I appreciate very much.
    • morgan macbride
       
      i feel the sarcasm too, but maybe state why you feel it is sarcastic
  • (http://popdivalc.blogspot.com/2010/02/wgo-may-best-charity-single-win.html)
    • morgan macbride
       
      use the link feature so you dont have to see the entire web address
  • I play sax in a college big band (with a focus on modern jazz), lay down the sax/keys parts in a folk rock group (we are currently in the studio working on our next album), and have a solo project focusing on electronic/indie music.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This is awesome and great information but reading it was a little difficult, maybe reword it to help the flow of it.
  • I have been exploring both the academic and creative sides of music on a daily basis. I am also working towards a Biology degree, for what it’s worth.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      This is great background, it tells a lot about how diverse of a person you are.
  • 1. Pay Attention!
  • You can see for yourself right here: Pop Trash. I
  • This blog,
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Maybe his not this
  • musical discussion.
  • hroughout the posts relevant to the current
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Also it might be a good idea to combine the discussion of the pink background and the description of the blog together.
  • She hails from Manhattan, New York.
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      I like hearing your opinion and your voice in your writing
  • It is just this whale-of-a comparison that is representative of Mel's creative way with words, which is on display in every one of her posts. I
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      Like the term whale-of-a comparison. Have some fun with your writing
  • feel like she is supplying a window into her mind,
    • Chelsea Hamill
       
      this is what you should add to your blog
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    funny idea
sunmeeholmes

Behind the Bleachers: Trifecta - 4 views

  • freakish
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Maybe a word with less negative associations would be more suitable?
  • Business is just one aspect of the complex sports world that has kept me so obsessed. I also feel that ethical issues in sports are very intriguing topics because ethics are constantly being challenged and violated - sometimes with little media attention, sometimes with too much.
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Maybe some way of combining these two sentences?
  • The steroid age will be over when you’re gone, Bud.
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Nice... "steroid age" in quotations?
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  • Although I enjoy a good demolition named after cheese as much as any other person
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Good aside.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      agreed, I like this sentence
  • He doesn’t always write about popular, media-friendly sports. He is not scared to go down all the way to the high school level. In his post titled
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Good rhythm.
  • does not
    • taylorcornelson
       
      doesn't
  • am hopeful that I can emulate Mark’s professionalism in my blog.
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Perhaps some more imagery in this post would be helpful?
  • wait…a college basketball player?! As Joe notes, it must have gone down like this:
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Very engaging diction.
  • Ah, doesn't everyone love a good Star Wars reference? Joe’s use of imagery here is outstanding.
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Great points.
  • Joe’s writing is great because he can
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Careful of the object in this sentence... you start talking about Joe's writing, not Joe himself. "Joe is a great writer because he can keep his voice..."
  • slam dunk home run knock out…you get the idea.
    • taylorcornelson
       
      Great ending. Enjoyed reading!
  • I want to talk about the impact of sports that stretches beyond the box score. Basically, I will dive into the magical world behind the bleachers – the one we usually don’t hear about.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      I think you can combine these sentences...it's using two analogies to say the same thing
  • To some, success isn’t measured in wins and losses. It’s all business, right?
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      These sentences are a good intro to your voice.
  • I researched the intricacies of the Collective Bargaining Agreements, and I was hooked.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Hmm...you researched this before the age of ten? Props if you did cuz it sounds complicated, but if not, you might want to clarify.
  • An example of the type of issues I hope to discuss
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Skip the "hope to discuss" and be more straightforward. Something like, "my blog will discuss..."
  • I will try my best to make sure that this blog
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Again, be more straightforward. When you write things like "I hope" or "I'll try my best" you're making promises you don't think you'll keep.
  • wish to discuss
  • I do not know if Technorati has filtered out inactive blogs
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Wait, what does this have to do with getting the amount of comments he deserves?
  • he presents topics from both the collegiate and professional level
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      "he also presents topics from the professional level"--collegiate twice is repetitive
  • The blogger, whose name is posted simply as “Mark”, is an attorney working in private practice. He spends most of his time dealing with sports related matters. Mark began work on this blog on January 11th 2005 and has posted about 3-4 times per week since then. His style involves using mostly short, but very information-heavy posts. Some of his posts are simply links to articles related to sports business that he found interesting, but didn’t have time to discuss.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Need some more of your voice in here! I know it's hard because you're listing info about the blogger...maybe you can mention information throughout the post, instead of writing it all down together.
  • Mark discusses the recent agreement that the city of Irving, Texas made with Kraft Foods.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      try to combine this with the next sentence to make it flow better
  • One thing that I really appreciate about this blog is that it does not try to be anything other than what it is. Mark knows that there probably isn’t an overwhelming population that is interested in sports business, but he sticks to his content.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      This is nice! It shows WHY you're interested in his blog.
  • Joe, a former writer for Sports Illustrated, updates his blog nearly every day and enjoys quite a large following.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Ooh, this is a much better way to write the technical info about a blogger...try this on your blogger profile post!
  • His use of all capital letters at the end of the quoted section also demonstrates the passion and aggression that this post was crafted with.
    • sunmeeholmes
       
      Maybe add a transition? It feels like you just stuck this in at the end.
morgan macbride

The CLIC Network - 0 views

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    similar system to what we are thinking of doing our website on
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