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Sitting on the cold floor of Foreman’s basement, as we called it, I ruined everything.
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Tex Tourais on 31 Aug 09I love it. It's the "as we called it" that really sells this line. You've got this interjection that makes the reader feel like the narrator is just meandering around, and then the quick jab: 3 small words with punch. Well constructed!
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At this point she came out from behind her door.
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started to yell
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