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ellen archie

Grant's blog - 1 views

shared by ellen archie on 01 Sep 09 - Cached
  • She was turned to stare unblinkingly at the nothing out the window, and the staring gray eyes were like chips of dead crystal.  Yet most striking of all was the liquid starlight that flowed down her figure, the rippling waves of white hair that shimmered in the moonlight.  She sat in stark contrast to the dark gloom of the train.
    • ellen archie
       
      I really like this description. I'm sort of wondering why she looks so un-grim, when (I assume) she was trying to kill herself though. Because she is all starlight, and for someone who won't talk and was trying to kill herself, that doesn't reallly make sense. So I want to know more about her
ellen archie

wacker's blog » Blog Archive » Good Friends - 1 views

  • kitchen grabbed
    • ellen archie
       
      I think there should be a comma here
  • Déjà vu stuck me because
    • ellen archie
       
      I think this part of the sentence is a little bit awkward.
  • That feeling of blatant betrayal, you always hear that metaphor, “Backstabber” but until then I didn’t know it actually physically hurt.
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