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Ashlee Duckworth

YouTube - VitaminWater commercial: LeBron James, Ace Attorney (2008) - 0 views

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  • Ashlee Duckworth on 10 Sep 08
     
    This television commercial is a representation of an ethos appeal of rhetoric. The fact that Lebron James has nothing to do with vitamin water, and yet is advertising for it shows that he is using his popularity to sell this product. Lebron James is known for his athletic abilities, he doesn't say anything about how the water tastes or what benefits drinking it gives you.
Dena Rennie

Brian Russo - 0 views

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shared by Dena Rennie on 16 Oct 08 - No Cached
  • War, and
    • Cybil Scott
      Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08
       
      perhaps a semi colon here
  • states “Just
    • Cybil Scott
      Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08
       
      comma after states
  • “the ‘Constitution’s “father” James Madison”.
    • Cybil Scott
      Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08
       
      ?????? too many quotations?
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  • that “no
    • Cybil Scott
      Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08
       
      comma
  • stifle
    • Cybil Scott
      Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08
       
      stifles
  • "false, scandalous and malicious writing or writings against the government of the United States, or either house of the Congress of the United States or the president of the United States."
    • Cybil Scott
      Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08
       
      you may have to site this.
  • Michael Levin
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      You need a tab here if it's a new paragraph. =)
  • as torture is justified only to save lives (not extort confessions or recantations), it is justifiably administered only to those known to hold innocent lives in their hands. Ah, but how can the authorities ever be sure they have the right malefactor? Isn't there a danger of error and abuse? Won't we turn into them?”
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      I don't know if you're using MLA format or not- but you might need to site this at the end of the quote.
  • “Self-imposed silence is as debilitating to a democracy as censorship.”
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      what's the source on this?
  • House Majority Leader Dick Armey
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      Can you think of any other way to word that? I know that's his title, but that seems really awkward reading it.
  • t "We
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      comma after *that*
  • McCullaghs
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      need an apostrophe unless you're talking about more than one McCullagh.
  • In 1978
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      you need a comma after the year.
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      Really good work overall, your biggest problem seemed to be grammatical errors which are the easiet to make. I don't know what sort of formatting you are using, which makes it hard to judge on what you should and should not site- but other than that I think it's a really good paper. Also- if you have your works cited page ready, that would be good to post sometime soon. Depending on what format style you used, mistakes are easily made with that as well. (p.s.- sorry it's so late, these last couple of weeks have been really hectic for me and I'm trying to get caught back up in all my classes! =/ my bad!)
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      also, after reading over it once again, the last half of the paper seems a little less organized than the first half. The first part flows very well, but the last couple of paragraphs seems to jump ideas a little bit. You might try rewording the first sentences of the paragraphs and that should help it.
  • f Declan McCullagh’s dissertation on the
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      you might wanna site where you found out its his dissertation. I don't think I remember reading that in the article.
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      I like how you positioned these two paragraphs together since they were similar articles. I felt both had a lot of similar content and made it flow very nicely.
  • cCullaghs comments somewhat mirror those of Foner’s, as he gives a brief history
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      I think this statement should probably go somewhere closer to the beginning. By now after reading the paragraph, it already seems a little bit of a given.
  • In the case of the people of Omelas, the same principles that apply to the cases of the United States apply there as well. They were a simple group of people, who were not by any means barbarians or killers, but were trying to be happy, and they needed few laws. A culture in which violent is an alien factor, innocent and without the fear of crime can truly thrive without an abundance of rules and regulations.  In the cases of situations like Abu Ghraib, the notorious prison in which prisoners were regularly executed, tortured, and forced to live under the worst conditions.
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      You might wanna clarify on who wrote about these subjects since you throw four names out there, and you almost always want to write as if your audience has no idea who wrote what.
  • The New Yorker
    • Dena Rennie
      Dena Rennie on 17 Oct 08
       
      I wanna say this should be italicized, but I'm not entirely sure. I know something should be done to distinguish it- but I am not entirely sure what.
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