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Michael Gutierrez

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Michael Gutierrez

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  • tury huma
    • Garrett Granger
       
      century, human
  • people
    • Garrett Granger
       
      Maybe use "others" here, instead of people?
  • Aristotle is “Credible,
    • Garrett Granger
       
      Aristotle is, "credible...
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  • r.” (Ramage and Bean 1).
    • Garrett Granger
       
      author" (Ramage and Bean 1).
  • America and
    • Garrett Granger
       
      America, and
  • what they are.
    • Garrett Granger
       
      Maybe can add: and how they have evolved into what they are today.
  • ss.”(Foner 1).
    • Garrett Granger
       
      progress" (Foner 1).
  • life, but we collectively
    • Garrett Granger
       
      life; but we all collectively have not.
  • people into what we are.
    • Garrett Granger
       
      You maybe are missing a couple of words here?? This doesn't make sense because you have not conveyed your full thought it seems.
  • is without a doubt an
    • Garrett Granger
       
      is without a doubt, an...
  • He has
    • Garrett Granger
       
      Try not to start off this sentence the same as you did the previous one. Rearrange this sentence or possibly combine the two into something like... He has succeeded in numerous accomplishments and has been honored....
  • Rhetoric plays an important role in the articles, journals, reviews, films and discussions that surround them.
  • He has
  • on certain points.
  • Every person has a personal opinion or bias on controversial issues, and it is up to each and every person to distinguish their personal and moral truth.
  • Pathos is another element
  • logos
  • which I find to be the most important to us as living, thinking individuals
  • He has been honored with respectable awards, and achievements, which add to the effectiveness and reliability of his writings.
  • Levin is well known as having controversial views
  • Levin asks a few rhetorical questions
  • Ethos can also work against people when discussing issues
  • mandatory.” He
  • People will be less susceptive to his views on social liberties than if he were a professor, historian, doctor, or other professional
  • tells a story of great happiness that depends on great misery (torture) for a small innocent child
  • Omelas
  • So, in essence, his rhetorical approach had an opposite effect on me.
  • No author wrote in their article, accept my message because I say so or because if you don’t
  • The context in which articles are published does not have great importance to me personally
  • His article discusses torture, and morality.
  • His article discusses torture, and morality.
  • barbaric.” (Levin 1)
  • emotions.” (Ramage, Bean 1).
  • Declan McCullagh, is a journalist, photographer, and programmer. In his article, “Why Liberty Suffers in Wartime”, he discusses the issue of restrained liberty in time of war.
  • is “a means of
  • environment, our relationships
  • publications she incorporates, a
  • indeed.” (Le Guinn 4).
  • minister earned
  • humanity.” (Hunsinger 1)
  • He uses
  • He uses
  • He uses
  • reasoning.” (Ramage and Bean 1).
  • beings we
  • degrees it
  • us. It
  • c that m
  • different, it allows
  • and the source of each
  • In considering
Sean McMillan

Gutierrez Michael - 0 views

    • Sean McMillan
       
      You need a concise thesis statement.
  • He quotes that National Security
    • Sean McMillan
       
      awkward wording.
  • He believes in treating all Americans equally. McCain quotes “Don’t increase taxes on anybody”. McCain wants to keep taxes the way they are. This is ethical, logical, and fair to all American citizens.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      choppy, cite quote.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      Good start on ethos, but you need to further explain all your points.
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  • In all I see Obama as a better rhetorical speaker; he appears more comfortable in oral or written communication. I do view John McCain as a better candidate for the position of President of The United States.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      support you claims as to why.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      find a concise overall conclusion based on rhetoric and support whatever claims you make.
  • The President of The United States, probably the most important position in the world, will be chosen. Rhetoric, skill in the effective use of speech, will be a crucial factor in determining the next President (Merriam Websters Collegiate Dictionary). Barack Obama and John McCain, the two main Presidential candidates, must be able to persuade American citizens toward their view.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      you use the same sentence struction 3 times in a row. Mix up your structures and usage.
  • Obama convinces his audience by telling them exactly what they want to hear. Obama convinces via the ideals of logos. Most of his answers to the elements which lay before him make perfect logical sense. Obama uses pathos in his Rhetoric. One hears passion and concern in the words of Obama. Ethos can also be found in many of Obama’s ideals. Obama seems to be ethical and moral by the ideas he has presented to American citizens.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      short, choppy writing. Assumed too many social norms.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      expand on all your points and use specific examples and quotes to support your claims.
  • Essay
    • Sean McMillan
       
      Just work on your style and thought process. Your writing seems a little choppy and unconcise. Try to find a simple to the point thesis and conclusion and work on the flow of your thoght process. Also just some small grammatical and wording mistakes.
  • this.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      This paragraph seems a little lost, none of the points pertain to your thesis. Maybe combine with the previous or next paragraph, or even add some thoughts on rhetoric pertaining to these points.
  • paper.
    • Sean McMillan
       
      This paragraph gets closest to your thesis idea, try to combine this and work it in with some of the earlier information. to make a very concise simple thesis statement.
  • Works cited
    • Sean McMillan
       
      mla format?
  • Iraq).
    • Sean McMillan
       
      this is a lot of good information, you just need to work in explanations from what all this means as far as obama's approach to rhetoric. Maybe how the audience would react to all these points.
Michael Gutierrez

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shared by Michael Gutierrez on 06 Nov 08 - Cached
  • (Merriam-Webster Online Dictionary).
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      Try using a shorter defenition.
  • I will discuss ethical decision making, analyzing and observing the usage of ethos, pathos and logos throughout the presidential election process.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      Dont tell the reader exactly what you are going to do. Give the reader a feel for what you are going to do.
  • Campaign ads, televised debates and speeches have all been organized specifically to communicate and persuade the American people.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      watch sentence structure
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  • In a recent video interview, Jim Wallis an evangelical Christian writer and political activist discusses religious issues that Americans will be faced with
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      sentence structure
  • purposing
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      proposing
  • and success in politics
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      give some examples
  • heady the appeal of a call to arms, however just the cause, we should still shed a tear for all that is lost when war claims its wages from us”.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      I dont think I would use a qoute that is this big. It allmost takes up the entire paragraph
  • has learned
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      has had
  • purposed
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      proposed
  • his platform
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      Describe his platform better. Many people will not know what it is.
  • A major issue concerning the next president will be the war in Iraq
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      Try to tye your paragraphs together better.
  • McCain uses logos
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      How does he use Logos?
  • Sometimes they work out, other times they have ended with inconceivable tragic consequences
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      This appears to be a fragment
  • You be the judge
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      good conclusion. I think this paper is good in that it has many good ideas. The one thing I would look at is the flow of the paper. Keep a look out for how you word your sentences.
Cybil Scott

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shared by Cybil Scott on 28 Nov 08 - No Cached
  • Equal access to clean water, healthcare, education, influence in political issues, and access to systems within a society are all social injustices that plague our world. Many individuals have come together, forming groups and communities in an a
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      I dont see how any of these are social injustices.
  • poverty
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      corruption
  • The choices were made indirectly for them, and without money and power had no say or influence.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      This sentence needs to be changed. Watch sentence structure
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  • The second reason is political ineptitude, or lack of influence due to religion, ethnicity or gender. Rwanda is made up of many different tribes.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      Dont understand this sentence
  • By supporting those that have been directly affected provides a foundation with which they can gain confidence to take action.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      I dont understand this sentence completely.
  • The main goals of social injustice groups are to put an end to harsh societal realities, and help the downtrodden to recover.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      You can never eliminate them completely
  • Some may find this statement to be ironic in the fact that social injustices are due to humans taking advantage of others.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      I dont completely agree with this Alex
  • where the strong survive.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      In this situation I do not completely agree. The strong dont survive genocide.
  • somewhat
    • Cybil Scott
       
      repetitive
  • affects
    • Cybil Scott
       
      effects
  • American’s
    • Cybil Scott
       
      no apostrophe here
  • Tutsi’s
    • Cybil Scott
       
      no apostrophe
  • 2 U.S.
    • Cybil Scott
       
      write out the numbers
  • believe that humans should have a somewhat innate human condition
    • Cybil Scott
       
      they do? and what does that mean exactly?
  • So I plan to stay active in the ONE community and do my small parts in helping our world progress
    • Cybil Scott
       
      i dont feel as if this essay was about personal reflection. how did you feel, how did you interact with the online community?
  • but to some, however crazy it sounds is logical in their eyes
    • Cybil Scott
       
      should probably fix this sentence
Michael Gutierrez

Gutierrez Michael - 0 views

  • Countries around the Globe
    • Dena Rennie
       
      Countries and Globe do not need to be capitalized.
  • Countries and Continents
    • Dena Rennie
       
      These don't need to be capitalized either.
  • After reviewing all the research I had collected, I decided to concentrate my efforts on the Continent of Africa. The social injustices and corruption concerning Africa is mind boggling.             For this particular assignment I decided to get involved with ACORD.
    • Dena Rennie
       
      This part sounds very redundant. I would try rewording this in a way so it doesn't sound so bland. You use the phrase "I decided" within two sentences of each other and they sit almost directly on top of one another.
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  • It is an Africa
    • Dena Rennie
       
      I'm guessing you mean "African"
    • Dena Rennie
       
      Overall, fairly well written. There are several grammatical errors, and words that are capitalized that don't need to be. I thought we were only supposed to write about one online community, not a variety- so I'm a little confused on that end. Maybe you could center your focus to a couple of sites and list them, that way it seems a little more credible and people who may become interested in can have a starting point as to where they get involved.
  • Since the beginning of human existence societies have had to deal with social injustices. Many wars have been fought concerning social injustices.
    • Michael Gutierrez
       
      Maybe try and combine these two sentances here.
  • Poverty and social inequality, around the world, is mainly caused by corruption. ACORD understands that in order to decrease poverty and social inequality it must halt corruption.
    • Alex Gutierrez
       
      where did this fact come from and is it a reliable source.
  • they do nothing to help the overall situation.
    • Alex Gutierrez
       
      doesnt really make sense. of course they are doing something to help the situation. Maybe reword this to make it sound not so contradicting.
  • poverty is just the tip of the iceberg.
    • Alex Gutierrez
       
      good analogy
Alex Gutierrez

Here is my first essay draft - 18 views

http://docs.google.com/a/mail.usf.edu/Doc?id=dwgptmz_0d9hqmzc8

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started by Alex Gutierrez on 10 Oct 08 no follow-up yet
Michael Gutierrez

my first essay draft - 13 views

https://docs.google.com/a/mail.usf.edu/Doc?docid=dhggtsg7_0d45z68d8&hl=en

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started by Michael Gutierrez on 10 Oct 08 no follow-up yet
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