Brian Russo - 0 views
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War, and
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Cybil Scott on 16 Oct 08perhaps a semi colon here
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states “Just
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“the ‘Constitution’s “father” James Madison”.
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that “no
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stifle
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"false, scandalous and malicious writing or writings against the government of the United States, or either house of the Congress of the United States or the president of the United States."
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Michael Levin
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as torture is justified only to save lives (not extort confessions or recantations), it is justifiably administered only to those known to hold innocent lives in their hands. Ah, but how can the authorities ever be sure they have the right malefactor? Isn't there a danger of error and abuse? Won't we turn into them?”
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I don't know if you're using MLA format or not- but you might need to site this at the end of the quote.
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“Self-imposed silence is as debilitating to a democracy as censorship.”
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House Majority Leader Dick Armey
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Can you think of any other way to word that? I know that's his title, but that seems really awkward reading it.
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t "We
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McCullaghs
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In 1978
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Really good work overall, your biggest problem seemed to be grammatical errors which are the easiet to make. I don't know what sort of formatting you are using, which makes it hard to judge on what you should and should not site- but other than that I think it's a really good paper. Also- if you have your works cited page ready, that would be good to post sometime soon. Depending on what format style you used, mistakes are easily made with that as well. (p.s.- sorry it's so late, these last couple of weeks have been really hectic for me and I'm trying to get caught back up in all my classes! =/ my bad!)
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also, after reading over it once again, the last half of the paper seems a little less organized than the first half. The first part flows very well, but the last couple of paragraphs seems to jump ideas a little bit. You might try rewording the first sentences of the paragraphs and that should help it.
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f Declan McCullagh’s dissertation on the
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you might wanna site where you found out its his dissertation. I don't think I remember reading that in the article.
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I like how you positioned these two paragraphs together since they were similar articles. I felt both had a lot of similar content and made it flow very nicely.
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cCullaghs comments somewhat mirror those of Foner’s, as he gives a brief history
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I think this statement should probably go somewhere closer to the beginning. By now after reading the paragraph, it already seems a little bit of a given.
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In the case of the people of Omelas, the same principles that apply to the cases of the United States apply there as well. They were a simple group of people, who were not by any means barbarians or killers, but were trying to be happy, and they needed few laws. A culture in which violent is an alien factor, innocent and without the fear of crime can truly thrive without an abundance of rules and regulations. In the cases of situations like Abu Ghraib, the notorious prison in which prisoners were regularly executed, tortured, and forced to live under the worst conditions.
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You might wanna clarify on who wrote about these subjects since you throw four names out there, and you almost always want to write as if your audience has no idea who wrote what.
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The New Yorker
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I wanna say this should be italicized, but I'm not entirely sure. I know something should be done to distinguish it- but I am not entirely sure what.
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