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Beauty Is No Longer Truth: The Trifecta! - 2 views

plasticvilleusa.blogspot.com/...trifecta.html

shared by Chelsea Hamill on 17 Apr 10 - Cached

My mother is a registered nurse, and after 18 years as a stay-at-home mom, re- entered the world of medicine as the nurse to our plastic surgeon friend.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i like how you are giving us your background and also a sense of authority and your knowledge in the field
  
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just as much cottage cheese
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  haha, very vivid metaphor
  
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rediculous
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  just so you can take note of this
  
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C’mon. Be Honest. You kinda love Heidi Montag. I mean, if nothing else you love to hate her. Frankly, I give her props. She has managed to stay in the spotlight for what, like 5 years now? (does anyone know why, exactly?) And just when she and good old Spencer begin to fade out of US Weekly…BAM! She’s on the cover of People, staring at you with her expressionless face (courtesy of unnecessary Botox) and breasts that are so unnaturally large they might pop out of the cover and stab you in the eyes.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i really like your voice here! i can see it in certain parts of the second post, but i feel that it's not too consistent.
  
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Celebrities: Our Walking Ads: Trifecta! - 3 views

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shared by Dongoh Kim on 10 Feb 10 - Cached

(dear God, please give me 20 something year old legs when I’m forty, too)
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i like these thought inserts, really shows your voice and character
  
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Gary Coleman
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i think it's great that you randomly insert celebrity names/ talk about celebrities. this really fits with your voice and the point of your blog!
  
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make mistakes, big mistakes.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  would it emphasize mistakes more if you separate that into 2 sentences.
  
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Bam! Here's
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  that's me! sorry, that wasn't a constructive comment.
  
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Real quick, I have to plug my own blog before you become aficionados of The Superficial and forget all about me: come here for a dose of celebrity lives from a different angle.  I’m not here just to make fun of celebrities, but also to let you know how reading about them/being obsessed with them, is affecting the way you do things and the way you think.  But, when it comes to good ol' celeb bashing, The Superficial is there for me, and you.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i like how you connected the post back to your blog without directly stating it.
  
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State of The Pop Scene: Trifecta - 2 views

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shared by Chelsea Hamill on 09 Feb 10 - Cached

Sometimes music relaxes me. Sometimes it inspires. Sometime it gets my blood-pumping
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  I like your use of repetition, but maybe choose to either use "music" or "it", i think that'll emphasizes the idea more.
  
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My blog will follow suit in this category—a focus on content above all.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  doesn't seem to connect with the flow of the paragraph. maybe add a transition word here?
  
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The sub-line of the “Pop Trash Addicts” title reads: “Oh no, you didn’t.” Well, oh yes, I did.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  haha, this part's funny!
  
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Besides being a pop fanatic, she has a love for "guilt pleasures, elephants, and all things aquamarine." Interesting.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i think you should have more of these choppy or one word sentences, it reveals more character and your voice.
  
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swift
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  just point this out so you remember to fix this
  
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al of her
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  so you can fix this too.
  
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as if I am the privileged owner of a limited release DVD with BONUS special features.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  i like these metaphors! makes the reader think and makes what you are saying more interesting.
  
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Mel's voice is casual, honest, and creatively playful. If she were a singer instead of a blogger she would definitely be singing with melismas.
- bamk340 on 17 Apr 10
  
  a good ending that connects with the beginning
  
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Scholarship Scams - International Financial Aid Advice Articles - 0 views

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Scholarships & Grants for International Students - 0 views

www.isoa.org/list_scholarships.aspx SOScollege international

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Study abroad in the US - How to Apply - 0 views

www.intstudy.com/...usaapply.htm SOScollege international done

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Study Overseas Site for International Education - 0 views

www.studyoverseas.com SOScollege international

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How to Apply to College Overseas | eHow.com - 1 views

www.ehow.com/13_apply-college-overseas.html SOScollege done

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CollegeAbroad.com - Full Undergraduate Degrees Abroad - 1 views

www.collegeabroad.com SOScollege international done

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