Bucket List FYE Proposal | AU COMM Studies - 0 views
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Chad Harriss on 05 May 11It's really just a bit more than this. Your proposal alos develops and builds community across classes by joining students together in a common project. Don't underestimate or undersell your idea.
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Ditto with this paragraph. I can see the Bucket List format sitting under this piece but since it's organized like an essay other readers won't know that you're responding to specific questions. For example, simply saying something exists comes out of the blue and reads awkwardly without the context of the proposal. You should also link back to that proposal so the readers (i.e. steering committee members can see that too.)
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You are not selling this project with this list. This reads like a to do list rather than five sentences that build excitement about your project. See the examples on the Drumbeat blog.
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A revision might look like this: 1. Learn about the Alfred community. 2. Meet new people. 3. Spread ideas. 4. Share experiences. 5. Look back at your accomplishments. These sentences are not terribly different than yours but the impact of the words is markedly different.
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