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Vincent DiDomenico - 0 views

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- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  I agree with the comment that conveience can at time bring laziness.... before I got to that sentence as I was reading that same thought came to my mind.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">I agree with the comment that conveience can at time bring laziness.... before I got to that sentence as I was reading that same thought came to my mind.</div>
  
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lest their message be skewed or viewed
- Janice Perez Rivera on 29 Nov 08
  
  This sentence could have a better flow. Maybe try "Unless their message was skewed or viewed...etc.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">This sentence could have a better flow. Maybe try "Unless their message was skewed or viewed...etc.</div>
  
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One from the sovereignty group might say the FP group didn’t put enough concerning their issues in
- Janice Perez Rivera on 29 Nov 08
  
  this sentence needs to be structured better. especially starting at the "FP group didn't put eough conncerning their issues in" it seemed like to me when I read this sentence that the word "concerning" did not fit, in that particular sentence.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">this sentence needs to be structured better. especially starting at the "FP group didn't put eough conncerning their issues in" it seemed like to me when I read this sentence that the word "concerning" did not fit, in that particular sentence.</div>
  
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These kinds of disagreements are the biggest enemy to any group or person fighting against social injustice, as they can hurt the team effort, and can cause the finished product to look sloppy. This could also put their message out as looking skewed or disorganized,
- Janice Perez Rivera on 29 Nov 08
  
  Good point.... It is also easier for a person to commplain about another group or person over the internet because they don't have to see the person...... things like this happen all the time in regular groups or organizations as well.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Good point.... It is also easier for a person to commplain about another group or person over the internet because they don't have to see the person...... things like this happen all the time in regular groups or organizations as well.</div>
  
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picking up a book and reading takes too long, or is too uninteresting.
- Janice Perez Rivera on 29 Nov 08
  
  try to stay away from "extra words" such as too, or, and etc, (suggestion for this sentence) ...picking up a book and reading it takes too long or is uninteresting.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">try to stay away from "extra words" such as too, or, and etc, (suggestion for this sentence) ...picking up a book and reading it takes too long or is uninteresting.</div>
  
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- Janice Perez Rivera on 29 Nov 08
  
  overall I feel that this is agood paper. Just a little more review and I think you will de great. Just don't forget to place your bibliography.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">overall I feel that this is agood paper. Just a little more review and I think you will de great. Just don't forget to place your bibliography.</div>
  
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I believe that they should include some of the videos that are currently posted on YouTube of the actual killings.
- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  This is a very good point. this would be a great way of showing and building up people's emotions on what is occuring to these animals
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">This is a very good point. this would be a great way of showing and building up people's emotions on what is occuring to these animals</div>
  
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The thinking capacity for the average dolphin is amazing, because they are highly intelligent.
- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  maybe here you should add some stats on how intelligent dolphins are.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">maybe here you should add some stats on how intelligent dolphins are.</div>
  
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Warning: this meant contains mercury and puts you at risk for serious health problems
- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  Don't forget to put direct quotations if yoour using a direct quote "Warning.........."
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Don't forget to put direct quotations if yoour using a direct quote "Warning.........."</div>
  
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into the lunches of school students!
- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  wow... I never knew .... that. That is crazy!!
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">wow... I never knew .... that. That is crazy!!</div>
  
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meat to try to raise
- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  should be and try to raise the public's...etc.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">should be and try to raise the public's...etc.</div>
  
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especially when the meat from the kills is contaminated
- Janice Perez Rivera on 28 Nov 08
  
  tr to make this flow a little better.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">tr to make this flow a little better.</div>
  
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Discussion: Your rhetorical life - 53 views

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In the only 2008 vice presidential
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  take out the word only. it's extra .. In the 2008 vice presidential....
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">take out the word only. it's extra .. In the 2008 vice presidential....</div>
  
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The war hits close to home with the vice presidential nominee. His son Beau is now in Iraq. He commented that he did not want his son going, but also does not want his grandchildren to have to go back later on
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  very interesting point. I did not know that the war for him was so close to home like you stated. i also did not know that he supported the war at first.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">very interesting point. I did not know that the war for him was so close to home like you stated. i also did not know that he supported the war at first.</div>
  
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“How we leave [Iraq] makes a big difference.”
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  notice how he used the word "we" which makes the audience really connect with him. Because we includes everyone.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">notice how he used the word "we" which makes the audience really connect with him. Because we includes everyone.</div>
  
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    Sarah Palin seems to feel more comfortable with oral rather than written communication. In her oral communication, it is obvious that she holds back nothing.
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  this is a very good and interesting point that you brought out
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">this is a very good and interesting point that you brought out</div>
  
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he just feels that he doesn’t have the right personality to run the United States.
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  That last sentence does not flow as well as it should.I think it's the word run "personality to run the United States" Maybe you should try,...he just feels that he doesn't have the correct personality to lead this country. or you can use the United States.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">That last sentence does not flow as well as it should.I think it's the word run "personality to run the United States" Maybe you should try,...he just feels that he doesn't have the correct personality to lead this country. or you can use the United States.</div>
  
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George bush
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  Make sure you capitalize Bush
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Make sure you capitalize Bush</div>
  
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When addressing and issue or speaking to the audience,
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  Instead of using and use an issue.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Instead of using and use an issue.</div>
  
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This theme was a great example of ethos, where he connected to people’s emotions with something they deal with everyday and love dearly, the family.
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  This is a very valid point on how he connected with the middle class. Just a suggestion another way that Obama connected with the middle class and getting them to feel connected to him in someway were they feel like he completely understands them was by advertisement through the internet... not just his websites but through facebook and myspace. That is how he reach to college students. Also the radio.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">This is a very valid point on how he connected with the middle class. Just a suggestion another way that Obama connected with the middle class and getting them to feel connected to him in someway were they feel like he completely understands them was by advertisement through the internet... not just his websites but through facebook and myspace. That is how he reach to college students. Also the radio.</div>
  
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He a great example of someone
- Janice Perez Rivera on 07 Nov 08
  
  He is a great example of someone verses He a great....
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">He is a great example of someone verses He a great....</div>
  
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