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English 102 - Orange | Blog | Closing Argument - 22 views

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    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Watch the capitalization here in your bibliography. Take a closer look at the mini-tutorial for the bibliography.
  • Jennifer Aubrey
  • Brown and Dittmar
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  • Carney
  • Levine
  • Turner and Hamilton
  • ideal body image
  • It is possible that antecedent body self-perceptions affect whether women select or avoid sexually objectifying media
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English 102 - Bear | Blog | The review of Ideas - 14 views

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  • “If we want to actually reduce the number of divorces, we need to make divorce less appealing to women.”(Davidson). What Davidson is expressing is that women are attracted to divorce. Marriage was once a partnership. “A person doesn’t cling to what they do not need. Therefore a woman will not cling to a man who is not needed.”(Feldman) Feldmon forwards Davidson’s thought, but it adds to it. Marriage is hard enough. If a the partner is not needed why would either party wish to go through the difficulties. “The origins of marriage was a simple set up, the man worked, the woman did not.”(Hendrix) Hendrix continues to expand on a common thought of partnership. Hendrix shows that originally that marriage partners were dependent on each other. The woman was dependent on the man for money and the man dependent on the woman for the upkeep of the house. Was it the best system? Possibly. Couples stuck together back then. They fought tooth and nail to keep their marriage strong and did what was best for the family. However, no one disagrees with women becoming part of the work force. “We need to find a middle ground”(Cochrane). Cochrane is speaking on  the terms of interdependence. She is saying that there has to be a middle ground between the powers.
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Excellent "conversational style" here, Daniel.
  • very article agrees on one thing.
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Good, but where are you other sources? If everyone agrees, can you show us little pieces of text that deomonstrate how they agree?
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  • Anderson
  • Cochrane
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English 102 - Orange | Blog | Closing Argument - 13 views

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  • Gillett, K., Harper, J., L
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      Title of Bibliography
  • mothers of moderate and high-risk females more often reported that they thought their daughters had been overweight at some time during their lives than mothers of comparison group females
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English 102 - Tiger | Blog | Closing Argument - 24 views

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  • (Kimmelman 153).
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      a little more reflection on the quotation you just offered us? can you help us make sense of it before you begin to respond?
  • just like what Kimmelman was talking ab
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Great. Making connections. A conversation!
  • BIBLIOGRAPHY
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Only three of the texts?
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Paige - Closing Argument - 0 views

  • Freeman wrote in the research article
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Nice job coming back to Freeman. I would like to have seen more of this back-and-forth between the authors.
  • Mark Fenton expressed in the article “Battling America’s Epidemic of Physical Inactivity: Building More Walkable, Livable Communities” many different things we can do to help the obesity problem in America. Fenton states, “We must create environments in which physical activity becomes a routine part of the day for more Americans.” By creating a more pedestrian friendly atmosphere it will encourage people to walk or bicycle to their destination instead of always using their automobiles. I agree with what Fenton is trying to explain within in his research. Children learn by the examples that are being set around them. If they see everyone driving in their cars every where they go the only thing they have in their heads is, “I can’t wait until i can drive.” Instead of realizing they can go the same exact distance on their bike and be much more healthy than if they were driving a car. Fenton expresses, “We all must become role models by walking and cycling whenever possible and inviting others to do so with us.” People don’t like feeling abnormal; they want to do what other people are doing around them. Which is a very true assumption on Fentons part, we must become the role models for the youth around us. We set the standards of what is acceptable and what isn’t. We need to change the “norms” while it’s still possible and contribute to reversing the obesity problem
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Great job here dealing with your source material. You quote, come-to-terms, reflect on the material you've introduced, and offer your own position. Then you come back to another quote by Fenton, and do much of the same. Excellent!
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The Astro Banshees | Blog | Closing Argument - 0 views

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  • In Dennis Burgess article ‘ObesityPproblem stems from Laziness’, he adresses the root cause of obesity. Burgess claims the root of obesity to be laziness. He argues that America does not have an ‘obesity problem’, rather a ‘laziness problem’. More specifically, Burgess makes mention of the correlation between children and parents concerning obesity. ‘As a child, I would go outside and “play”. This involved getting up off the couch and exerting myself. But many of today’s children don’t participate in this type of play. And many of today’s parents sit on the couch right next to them’ (Dennis B. Burgess). Burgess makes the correlation by stating that the parents often times discourage active play by not setting the example. Parents would rather sit with their kids on the couch than take the initiative and go outside with their kids and take a walk or play ball. Parents do indeed play a role in their children’s health and ultimately have some effect on their children’s health. Healthy kids most often have healthy parents who encourage their kids good health by setting the example well and partaking in activity with their kids.
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Excellent work here, Lizzy. You stick nice and close to the quotation that you actually introduce. Then you reflect on it some. Then you offer your own position. This is a great job.
  • Andrea Freeman addresses the issue of fast food in her article ‘Fast Food: Oppression Through Poor Nutrition.’ Freeman considers fast food in respects to low- income families. ‘Fast food has become a major source of nutrition in low- income, urban neighborhoods across the United States’ (Freeman, pg. 1). Less privelaged families must make do with their current financial situation. The easiest most convenient food source for low- income families is that of fast food. Therefore, parents have a direct effect on their children’s health.
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      This quotation is less successful. You really don't reflect on Freeman's quotation at all.
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Lizzy - Closing Argument - 0 views

  • In Dennis Burgess article ‘ObesityPproblem stems from Laziness’, he adresses the root cause of obesity. Burgess claims the root of obesity to be laziness. He argues that America does not have an ‘obesity problem’, rather a ‘laziness problem’. More specifically, Burgess makes mention of the correlation between children and parents concerning obesity. ‘As a child, I would go outside and “play”. This involved getting up off the couch and exerting myself. But many of today’s children don’t participate in this type of play. And many of today’s parents sit on the couch right next to them’ (Dennis B. Burgess).
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Excellent work here with your quotation. Now you've just got to work with double quotation marks, not singles.
  • Parents do indeed play a role in their children’s health and ultimately have some effect on their children’s health. Healthy kids most often have healthy parents who encourage their kids good health by setting the example well and partaking in activity with their kids.
  • Andrea Freeman addresses the issue of fast food in her article ‘Fast Food: Oppression Through Poor Nutrition.’ Freeman considers fast food in respects to low- income families. ‘Fast food has become a major source of nutrition in low- income, urban neighborhoods across the United States’ (Freeman, pg. 1).
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Your use of quotation here is less effective because you don't really come to terms with the quote. You just quote it, and then state your own position. Spend more time with the quotation.
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Cat - Closing Argument - 1 views

  • have to disagree
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      I'm not sure you've really come-to-terms with this quotation yet. You quote the article, but you don't really address the specifics of the quotation you've chosen.
  • he author argues
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      This is exactly the spot where you need a quotation to help us understand the specifics of the author's position.
  • The author mentions the possibility of a change in design of our surrounds might help aid in the fight against obesity. 
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Jeff G - Closing Argument - 0 views

  • Rachel Johnson is quoted in the article saying
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      Which article are you taking this from?
  • You could make things so that people must get exercise
  • the institutionalized practices and policies of government and the fast food industry
    • Ryan Trauman
       
      This is a really interesting quotation. Can you take it apart a bit more? What does she mean when she writes this? How could "the government" play a different role?
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