How can I word the following paragraph better? - 3 views

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  #1 hohviolist on 12 Aug 12

   

  Hi everyone! I hope your summer is going well.
  
  This is Wendy Cheng writing. I did a presentation on how to teach hearing-impaired children at this year's special learner's academy.
  
  I've been asked to write an article that would provide tips on how adults with cochlear implants can take music lessons. I have this paragraph (on finding a music teacher) which needs work. Here is how the section begins:
  
  "One challenge will be to find a music teacher who is willing to teach adults and be willing with an adult who has hearing loss. This could take a while, because some music teachers are not interested in teaching adults or have not been trained to work with adults. But keep looking!"
  
  This paragraph, although mostly truthful, could probably deter or discourage someone who wants to take lessons badly, but encounter difficulties in finding a teacher. Does anyone have any idea how I can soften the tone of the paragraph?
  
  Sometimes I think it would be great if there was a nationwide "registry" of music teachers willing to take on adult students with sensory disabilities. How do we get NAFME interested in pursuing something like this? I probably could design such a registry but would need a list of teachers. My association does not have a lot of teachers on our membership rolls.
  
  Many thanks!
  Wendy

   

  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">Hi everyone! I hope your summer is going well. <br /> <br /> This is Wendy Cheng writing. I did a presentation on how to teach hearing-impaired children at this year's special learner's academy. <br /> <br /> I've been asked to write an article that would provide tips on how adults with cochlear implants can take music lessons. I have this paragraph (on finding a music teacher) which needs work. Here is how the section begins: <br /> <br /> "One challenge will be to find a music teacher who is willing to teach adults and be willing with an adult who has hearing loss. This could take a while, because some music teachers are not interested in teaching adults or have not been trained to work with adults. But keep looking!" <br /> <br /> This paragraph, although mostly truthful, could probably deter or discourage someone who wants to take lessons badly, but encounter difficulties in finding a teacher. Does anyone have any idea how I can soften the tone of the paragraph? <br /> <br /> Sometimes I think it would be great if there was a nationwide "registry" of music teachers willing to take on adult students with sensory disabilities. How do we get NAFME interested in pursuing something like this? I probably could design such a registry but would need a list of teachers. My association does not have a lot of teachers on our membership rolls. <br /> <br /> Many thanks! <br /> Wendy</div>

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