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Katie Bradley

Dear America - Prac SAC conferencing - 0 views

    • Katie Bradley
       
      Hello Yr 12 students, You can view our highlights and annotations from SAC conferencing blogs in our MSC and La Trobe Uni group page.
  • The epilogue of the text is a letter written post-war from a mother to her dead son Bill. Eleanor Wimbish’s depth of love for her son and suffering over his loss is put to the reader and though it lays bare one of the primary cruelties of war, the anguish of a parent at the death of their child, the implied reader sees that Edelman has used her story to show the strength that people draw from their ability to be connected.
    • Katie Bradley
       
      epilogue implied reader what do these metalanguage terms mean?
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  • different people respond
    • Katie Bradley
       
      To respond well to this question a person needs to discuss the different groups of people represented in the text: the soldiers - 'cherries', 'grunts', the army leaders, the Vietnamese civilians, family and friends of soldiers at home in America, the VC. Can we think of any other groups that could feature in the discussion?
Katie Bradley

Dear America - Prac SAC conferencing: Student Practice Response - 2 views

  • Furthermore, in Dear America Edelman has incorporated within the overarching plot some sub-plots particular to certain soldiers to ensure the reader is taken on a narrative journey that can deliver to them the level of emotional impact that is needed to in some way grasp an understanding of the traumas endured
    • Katie Bradley
       
      This sentence is very long. Consider rephrasing it for better clarity.
    • Katie Bradley
       
      Perhaps place a full stop after narrative journey. Then continue - This journey delivers to the reader a level of emotional impact ....
  • Poetry by the soldiers adds to this, one expresses, ‘We suffer in agony, as women, In labour. But we die with the birth, for Our child is war’.
    • Katie Bradley
       
      New point being incorporated into conclusion. Aim to avoid this.
  • Edelman comments, ‘chapters suggested themselves…into a sequence that would relate a year’s tour in Vietnam’. The chapter titles work on a metaphorical level to show
    • Katie Bradley
       
      Good to see incorporation of metalanguage and comments on how the text works. Referring to Edelman's editorial choices is excellent.
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  • George Olsen comments to Red, ‘…I really loused up…I was afraid’.
    • Katie Bradley
       
      Reference to characters and use of quotes is important. Well done.
Katie Bradley

http://vceconflict5.blogspot.com/ - 0 views

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    This is the page where we will put up our practice writing to conference.
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