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Solid graph. I really like the way you are inserting yourself into this story.

Awkward punctuation.

The "when" begs for a quote. The sentence can be reworked slightly to avoid that.

I wonder if this is true. To what degree does the digital divide prevent access to blogs within the ghettos of the U.S.?

In some ways, I wonder if this paragraph is even necessary. It departs from the subject in some ways only to shine a light on the method of delivery.

Excellent quote. Add a powerful sentence to contextualize this within your own effort. This can serve as the springboard to the remainder of the piece.

The final sentence of this section does this to some degree, but link the notion about violence and marketing together for the reader.