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The Weight of Reality - 0 views

  • They are taken out of their lives and given a chance to focus on losing weight and regaining their health, a luxury that most Americans cannot afford.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      good point
  • although I’ve been looking into whether or not weight loss TV shows can play a role in motivating people to lose weight, it might benefit me to see what else can inspire people
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Good spot to input your thoughts on motivating factors. It seemed like you were working up to this unknowingly from previous posts.
  • who doesn’t sweat
    • Scott Prentice
       
      hahah
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Educational Problems among Different Ethnic Groups - 3 views

  • To fulfill your interests,
    • Scott Prentice
       
      awkward start...maybe you could change this a bit to make it a little more catchy
  • This is also the main reason why other “normal students”
    • Scott Prentice
       
      maybe you can say instead...students who fall into the norm
  • however, these facts must be integrated into creativity and critical thinking in order for students to actually use and contribute it into the real world. Just Memorizing is not even an education.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      good point
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  • But I will not be like that.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Maybe you can articulate this sentence more in a different way
  • exciting
  • First, his accent, inflection, intonation, and speech-sound are arranged in a slow and soft way generating a poetic diction.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Maybe you can talk more about one of these in more detail and how it strengthens his writing
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Celebrities: Our Walking Ads - 3 views

  • , we realize that there are already ten people in your close vicinity with the same thing on.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      this is a funny/interesting observation
  • So, my recommendation to you, take The Superficial pill once in awhile, to prevent an overdose in gossip that will make you feel self conscious, or leave you wishing you lived a different life
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Maybe a few commas can be taken out in this sentence.
  • Real quick, I have to plug my own blog before you become aficionados of The Superficial and forget all about me: come here for a dose of celebrity lives from a different angle
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Good transition to close your post
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  • Anne is like you and me: so called normal people.  I'm pretty sure she doesn't have a slew of paparazzi
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Good way to differentiate her from the other super popular bloggers, but doesn't every popular blogger end up getting nearly the attention as the celebs they gossip on once they build their fan base? Just a thought.
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Dirty Secrets of College Admissions - The Daily Beast - 0 views

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Is Google Making Us Stupid? - Magazine - The Atlantic - Nicholas Carr - 11 views

  • . Now my concentration often starts to drift after two or three pages.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      This is exactly how I have been starting to feel because after years of browsing the internet. He hit the nail right on the head.
  • Still, their easy assumption that we’d all “be better off” if our brains were supplemented, or even replaced, by an artificial intelligence is unsettling. It suggests a belief that intelligence is the output of a mechanical process, a series of discrete steps that can be isolated, measured, and optimized
    • Scott Prentice
       
      The problem with this assumption is that the author assumes it is within Page and Brin's agenda to formulate ideas and decisions for us. He states that it is a possibility that they would like to replace our our minds with artificial intelligence.
  • Just as there’s a tendency to glorify technological progress, there’s a countertendency to expect the worst of every new tool or machine.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      This is what my initial thought of what this article was going to be about; just another person problematizing a situation.
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  • He feared that, as people came to rely on the written word as a substitute for the knowledge they used to carry inside their heads, they would, in the words of one of the dialogue’s characters, “cease to exercise their memory and become forgetful.”
    • Scott Prentice
       
      This is a very interesting factoid.
  • I’m not the only one. When I mention my troubles with reading to friends and acquaintances—literary types, most of them—many say they’re having similar experiences.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Again, this is similar to how I feel and how my friends appear to act sometimes. It is something that I've felt but I've just never been again to put my finger on it.
  • we may well be reading more today than we did in the 1970s or 1980s, when television was our medium of choice
    • Scott Prentice
       
      I'm sure the same issue arose during the popularization of television and its tendency to push individuals away from literacy.
  • Even a blog post of more than three or four paragraphs is too much to absorb. I skim it.”
    • Scott Prentice
       
      After speaking to a friend about how websites and the content within are formed, it is supposedly forbidden to write long paragraphs and such. Most content is writen in the form of bullent point and short paragraphs that are written to get directly to the point.

Conscious Living - 0 views

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The Brain Surgeon, the Janitor, and the Six-Inch Pizza - 0 views

  • Imagine a Brain Surgeon’s office.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      This dramatically sets the scene for the reader
  •  Certainly the janitorial duties at the office are critical to success.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      The author uses the word "certainly" which pushes you toward one direction of the topic he is talking about.
  • Does this mean the surgeon should perform the janitorial duties?
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Asking the question allows the readers to be more interactive so that it is sort of like a dialogue.
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  • Absolutely not and everyone can see that.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      The author just answered the question for us and distiguished that "everyone can see that". By doing this he gets us to agree.
  • but is that a good use of his time?
    • Scott Prentice
       
      Again, the author asks a question to more intimiately involve the reader
  • No, because he has a valuable and rare skill and he creates the most value when he concentrates on that and lets someone else do the other stuff.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      The author once again answers his question to prove his point.
  • Big mistake.
    • Scott Prentice
       
      By abruptly stoping the flow and rhythm from the previous sentence, he gets the reader's attention.
  • So what?
    • Scott Prentice
       
      ties in a strong voice and tone to the post.
  • the most value-adding
    • Scott Prentice
       
      more attention is to be noted for this because of the italics and bold.
  • How much time should you spend dusting up the last remaining dust particle in your house?
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