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shined
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shown
- Chris Pierce on 30 Apr 10
  
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King’s
- Chris Pierce on 30 Apr 10
  
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haven’t
- Chris Pierce on 30 Apr 10
  
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“I bet you’re going to tell me.” Ankara blurted out sternly
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  "I bet you're going to tell me," Ankara blurted out sternly. (Have a look at this very carefully. Formatting quotations is important to potential editors. I can give you a couple of pointers--just ask.)
  
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the saddle of his dragon
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enemy.” he said.
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and viciously bit its neck ridden with scales of black
- Chris Pierce on 19 May 10
  
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thrusted it
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yelped in pain an
- Chris Pierce on 19 May 10
  
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and knew this was his end, but he never gave up
- Chris Pierce on 19 May 10
  
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throughout the battle
- Chris Pierce on 19 May 10
  
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christilynn: 'No Tomorrow' - A Narrative Poem - 0 views

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unkept with
- Chris Pierce on 26 Apr 10
  
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was my last day I'd
- Chris Pierce on 26 Apr 10
  
  Twisted tense? Is 'Today is...' more natural?
  
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Piccy's EWC Blog: Ode To Music - 1 views

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angels song
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Piccy's EWC Blog: March 2010 - 2 views

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shall be a
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Courtney Olmsteadz EWC Blog: Journal #7: "The Myth of Technology" - 0 views

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condemn
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christilynn: Radio Play - 0 views

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ers suspecte
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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i'm right on
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
  comma before sir since it's direct address
  
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Were in the m
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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no where
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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God Jared, w
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
  Comma before Jared too. (Remember, "Let's eat Joe...)
  
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ushes how proff
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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Drive thre
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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christilynn: Journals - 0 views

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Us North Am
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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Alot of my fri
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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gonna be a
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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playwrights a
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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english as my f
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
  I really respect you for figuring this out. I fought it for many many years...
  
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- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
  I love your graphics by the way... truly.
  
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Technology has bee
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  I like how this entry is divided into paragraphs. It's much more reader friendly.
  
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christilynn: Character Sketch - 0 views

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loudley
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ED DIMARTINO: Ideal Clash - 0 views

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ary with lau
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privelage in
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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Kyle Lowe: One Act Radio Play - True Feelings of the Hero - 0 views

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[Enter a young woman, about 20 years of age. She is completely unaware of the conversation.]
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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your good..
- Chris Pierce on 11 Mar 10
  
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Hunter's blog: Good morning. How's the leg? - 1 views

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and helpless,”
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christilynn: The Fairytale (a children's nursery rhyme) - 0 views

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long long time
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
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nursery rhymes.
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
  What a really fresh sounding start... and yet familiar too.
  
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then the day.
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
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eachother slo
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Woke up from her
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
  I would sart the line with 'She' - I think it scans better.
  
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come for me?
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
  I would end the line after 'come' -- 'for me' runs over the metre. Of course, it means you have to change the final line of the stanza so that it still rhymes... Ah, a poet's work is never done.
  
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peeked through the clouds,
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
  This line is a little prosy (like regular language rather than the more compressed language of poetry). Could you shorten it a couple of syllables?
  
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something that went tink.
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
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I've come to steal your heart away,To take it when I can.And with a dozen roses,A ring with them i'll send.
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
  Use quotation marks around the words spoke aloud. Be sure to capitalize the 'I' in I'll
  
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- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
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From my heart I must confess.
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
  I think this line sounds like a warm up to a fuller statement of his feelings. Perhaps you could insert another stanza.
  
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i'll leave apart of me,Tomorrow i'll l
- Chris Pierce on 04 Mar 10
  
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Varga's Writers Craft: Childrens Story Screen Play - 0 views

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fire mom!
- Chris Pierce on 02 Mar 10
  
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ontop of
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Arpita's Class Blog: Shark Fining - 0 views

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shark-fining
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  Are you sure that this is how it's spelled? I'm thinking that 'finning' would rhyme with 'winning' and 'fining' would rhyme with 'lining.'
  
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Arpita's Class Blog: Radio Play #2: "Manifesting a Ride" - 2 views

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yeah, I feel f
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  I'd start each line with a capital letter, for consistency's sake
  
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we are God.
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  This could use some context. Is she suggesting that since God is omnipresent then everything in the universe ie God?
  
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as if shrugging sho
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  Can you say OK for me as though you are shrugging your shoulders? I'll close my eyes and tell you whether I can hear it or not. :)
  
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breeze smelled lik
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  Present tense might be more effective here. It keeps the sensation immediate and present, rather than over and ended
  
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He'll stop for some pretty
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  Is one of the girl's likely to speak up about the potential saftey issue? Then another can say "It's fine, there's 3 of us and only one of him..."
  
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me and my wife
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  This raises questions about the driver. Approximately what age would he be? (this is important for casting the play). Also, what class background? Some speakers would say "Me and my wife" --grammatically correct but impolite --"My wife and I" Polite but grammatically incorrect --"My wife and me" both polite and grammatically correct.
  
  <div class="cArrow"> </div><div class="cContentInner">This raises questions about the driver. Approximately what age would he be? (this is important for casting the play). Also, what class background? Some speakers would say "Me and my wife" --grammatically correct but impolite --"My wife and I" Polite but grammatically incorrect --"My wife and me" both polite and grammatically correct.</div>
  
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Chelsea Gomes, Journals: Journal # 1 - 0 views

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not always the kind of things that anyone else really cares that much about
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  That's one opinion... I think that people probably don't even know what they know until they begin writing. We always assume that what we know is common or boring but often it's not to others. You are the only person who sees the world from where you stand. That will make your writing unique.
  
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I am the Flyer captain,
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
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Chelsea Gomes, Journals: Journal # 2 - 0 views

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all three of these p
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
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Chelsea Gomes, Journals: Journal # 3 - 0 views

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the amount of kids
- Chris Pierce on 26 Feb 10
  
  'number' of kids since they can be counted. Use 'amount' for stuff that you pile, like laundry or garbage.
  
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