The "hook" discussed in education is always important to capture your audience and I think the illustration and explanation in the beginning of this paper were great. Painting pictures for your audience tend to draw your readers in and get them to thinking while they are reading. Although this paper involved research, there was more personal knowledge, which isnt a bad thing, but some areas did need more research to support the argument. Although each section was written in good detail, the flow of the paper was not present due to the lack of transitional phrases or the ability of the reader to stay connected throughout the entire paper. Overall, the writers have extensive knowledge in the content, but more research would need to be incorporated to support the arguments or statements. Thanks.
Mary Jones
3 ( THREEE!!)