This is a bit informal for a proposal. From a teacher's perspective, I like seeing the reflective components that you have outlined but from a steering committee member perspective this level of info is unnecessary and distracting.
Of course, the hope is that students participate early and continue participating over the course of their time at AU. Set yourself some goals for participation in clubs. Ask Dan what percentage of students currently participate and then set an achievable goal to reach.
This idea can be stated more plainly and effectively.
You want incoming AU students to explore and interact with the community, and to have them capture and share the experience.